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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738


0 posted 2003-02-14 03:55 PM


Within the folds
of your loving mind
I
make the forest
just for you
to run barefoot...on my soil

yes...so prettily...

dig your fingers into me

so exactly what I feel--
free
and safe in arms
at the same time...


my wild wind...she dances through
moonbranches...gowndancing...

not a  wild thing, unleashed
just?
wanting
  yearning
     every leaf
        to dance
       a quivering
   that brings
joy of just
alive again


in reverence .....

and wonderment

(the same pulse)

that such as we exist

with me
in the folds of your loving mind.
(and I, made the forest
just for you to run...
barefoot...on my soil.)
--dig
your fingers...into me...
       my wild wind--she dances through
moonbranches...gowndancing...

(the same pulse)
     beating
at the same moment

as waves that happen
just with thought
before the stone
is tossed...to pond.
the waters
~ripple~
circles drift,
anticipating...

that
  which has
     happened before
circles wider...evermore...
expanding till we
reach the shore
then
we bounce
we're back again
to touch me
where I've not been touched--before...


in lives
    in octaves
       in spiral motes

our song on pristine page
      notes of us
        in quartered rhyme
           to dance in jazz


improv

offstage

within the folds

  of your loving mind...
    

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (02-14-2003 03:58 PM).]

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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
1 posted 2003-02-14 04:45 PM


wild, naked, and free,
can i join , make it a threesome?

Cpat Hair
Deputy Moderator 1 Tour
Member Patricius
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793

2 posted 2003-02-14 04:47 PM


nice.... you two sing well together...

extremely nice to see you back on the pages
and this is an example of why..


hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 2003-02-14 05:03 PM


What a lovely duet...you two make beautiful poetry together
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

4 posted 2003-02-14 09:04 PM


my wild wind...she dances through
moonbranches...gowndancing...

not a  wild thing, unleashed
just?
wanting
  yearning
     every leaf
        to dance
       a quivering
   that brings
joy of just
alive again

in reverence .....

and wonderment

(the same pulse)

that such as we exist

with me
in the folds of your loving mind.
(and I, made the forest
just for you to run...
barefoot...on my soil.)
--dig
your fingers...into me...
       my wild wind--she dances through
moonbranches...gowndancing...

(the same pulse)
     beating
at the same moment

as waves that happen
just with thought
before the stone
is tossed...to pond.
the waters
~ripple~
circles drift,
anticipating...
that
  which has
     happened before
circles wider...evermore...
expanding till we
reach the shore
then
we bounce
we're back again
to touch me
where I've not been touched--before...
=========================================


OH MY OH MY OH MY OH MY!!!!!!!!

*sigh*

a long time ago....you gave me this reply on a duet effort of mine....it seems to apply here so lusciously...heh......


quote:
First there is such a startling show of the honest emotion of love in this piece I am convinced that the two of you wrote this in the nude.  

The images strike deep chords and the fluency is just liquid--it just poured off the screen and into my heart. (I obviously LOVED this...   )

And before I write a book here? I'd just like to add that your styles don't just "complement" each other...they actually temper each other, coaxing instead of coercing the best from each other.

DITTO baby...DITTO

Instead of using your words against you..I rubbed ya the right way with them. rofl

Beautiful melding of words you two.



      
" ... and I never saw blue like that before."

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

5 posted 2003-02-14 09:31 PM


Jan? I'd let ya eat fruitloops in bed with us...grin...

GAWD I LOVE YA GIRLIE...

wranx
Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn
6 posted 2003-02-16 12:32 PM


Uh, well....I think that Janet Marie has this pretty well covered...

But, Let me add that this is a song sung gladly...and heard.

A beauty!

Ed

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