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pk
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since 2003-02-11
Posts 23


0 posted 2003-02-14 11:47 AM


Looking for any critique or feedback or ideas

Endospores

My thoughts are like endospores
Wrapped in a coat
Without hope of ever being free
Please believe, to write
Is to love
Maybe not a poet, but a speaker of his beliefs
To share with all the lonely thoughts
Bottled up inside me
Hiding me from this thing called conformity
Where blonde hair and blank stares
Substitute for the black hole
Growing around this materialistic society
Originality?
Finds no home here
You better go catch the bus to Mexico
Whoa!
What do you mean Bush runs a tyranny?
No, war on Iraq
Sounds good to me
Don’t you know we have a slumping economy?
Keep talking like that son
You will be in the next draft of imperialistic greed.
See to me those boys overseas
Are nothing but machines
Led to the stream where lions scream
Sir don’t you understand
Muslims as well as Christians play a hand
Don’t matter to me
Cuz war is part of history
And Peace but a pipe dream
Do you believe
You can change this dirty rag into something clean?

No more war!

"Imagine what you would do if you knew no one was looking"

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Brad Majors
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Georgia
1 posted 2003-02-14 12:03 PM


I really like this. I have no ideas but  will try to think of some and get back to you
the_loner_23
Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
2 posted 2003-02-14 12:18 PM


I like this a lot

Cold hands means a warm heart

inkedgoddess
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since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
3 posted 2003-02-17 09:05 PM


kind of beat,man
good, keep going with it

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