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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2003-02-14 07:42 AM


The wind carried paper in its icy cold grip,
Candy wrappers and pretty valentines of red,
But it lashed through thin cotton clothing like a whip
And ripped the broad brimmed battered blue hat from her head.
She smiled at the passerby cars that slowed to gawk,
As her skirt danced around her white legs so icy cold
That the wind massaged to numbness as she did walk,
Hoping for the warmth of buyers to whom she sold.
The cars seldom slowed and none were stopping to talk
Numb legs were shaky moving and about to fold
Then the slanted sidewalk cold coated made her slip.

There upon the ground
She finally cried ice tears
With sad sobbing sound.

A car stopped by her
And invited her enter
Where it was warmer

She gracelessly pulled her frozen self to her feet,
Walked over and climbed into the waiting black car
Just happy to at last get off the windy street,
No thinking about the hands of a predator,
No worry about anything but her warming once more,
Everything was gone even her body was sold,
No wonder of tomorrow or what was in store
Only the moment and escaping from the cold.
Noticing things around her with in the back car
Then returned to the profession so very old
But this was something less and yet was something more.

There at the motel
She sleepily into bed fell
And he bid her well.

But touching her not
In that place where she’d been brought,
Was not what he sought.

She woke up the next morning,
Strange dreams in her head swarming
On the bed stand was money
But she had not earned any
And there was more than plenty
Her heart and soul was warming.

The new day begun
Her new life begun
February 14th

Gloom


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Margherita
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1 posted 2003-02-14 08:03 AM


This is absolutely wonderful and deeply touching.
Tears come forth.
Love, Margherita

regards2you
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2 posted 2003-02-14 09:42 AM



Professor,

Not gloomy!  I like this tale so much. And, you sure lead me on, thinking the worse was about to happen. Imagery great.

"The slanted sidewalk cold coated"... I like that...

Wonderful fairy tale ending...

Perfect for today. Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Seymour Tabin
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3 posted 2003-02-14 09:55 AM


Professor,
The story old but the moral still applies.
Enjoyed the write and the read.

Gentle Spirit
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4 posted 2003-02-14 10:01 AM


Nicely done Proff.  well done
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2003-02-14 10:23 AM


How beautiful this story is!
Fantastic imagery...much enjoyed.
~Husg, Smiles, & Happy Valentine's Day~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

garysgirl
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6 posted 2003-02-14 10:28 AM


OH,Prof, the ending of this is so beautiful. I could just see the poor girl (woman) standing on the street. You told this so good. I'm really glad that it ended the way it did......
the_loner_23
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7 posted 2003-02-14 10:29 AM


Awesome write as usual

Cold hands means a warm heart

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
8 posted 2003-02-14 10:56 AM


Her new life begun
February 14th...

sounds about right
as always

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