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pjtalty
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0 posted 2003-02-13 08:47 PM



Memories of the Long Jiang River
flow easily through my mind
like the slow motion replay
of a treasured film.

Images of her fall free like a waterfall
from the edge of my knowing
to the reservoir containing
all important symbols of my life.

There she is, standing by a boulder
on the banks of the Long Jiang River;
in the background locals do the family wash,
the river swiftly carries swirling suds away.

My mind’s eye zooms in on her:
Beautiful, fragile, wondrously bathed
in a mystic smile that makes the waters
glitter with a frenzy of sparkling beams.

We slowly cross the river in a ferry
powered by two women with oars.
We share the backdrop of surreal limestone peaks
with fisherfolk on Chinese river boats.

Something else we share: flooding emotions,
desperate realization that soon we must part
at the Long Jiang River, and even worse,
she must stay with her river; I must go to mine.

Patrick Talty

© Copyright 2003 Patrick Talty - All Rights Reserved
Bill Charles
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1 posted 2003-02-13 09:30 PM


pjtalty - this write is a treasure, well written...

BC

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2 posted 2003-02-14 03:18 AM



JamesMichael
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3 posted 2003-02-14 03:32 AM


Fantastic...James
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4 posted 2003-02-14 08:40 AM


nice work.. I enjoyed
regards2you
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5 posted 2003-02-14 02:37 PM




Good imagery and though sad, liked the ending.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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