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GG
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Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-02-13 04:36 PM



Every step I encounter
I can feel the quiet.
Like a wind-chill on my bones
And a happy memory.

Silence of my mind
Lost in confusion.
And I cannot relay to you
This swiftness of my steps
As you walk by and look
At me.

Much like a tamed lion,
Still never to be trusted
My stride is never caught
Stillness leads me
To hopes of tears.

And I walk

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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El_Campeador
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1 posted 2003-02-13 04:42 PM


"Every step I encounter
I can feel the quiet.
Like a wind-chill on my bones
And a happy memory."

I like those lines... Good poem, Alyssa. Keep up the writing!

“We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson

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2 posted 2003-02-13 11:31 PM




Alyssa,

I can't say I fully understand this but it seems to have to do with trusting someone who changes and isn't always the same....that you can't count on that person...had hopes the situation was one way, but not necessarity is..

Anyway, that is my take and I like it.

Hugs and love  Pat

hope you are doing okay w. headache

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-02-13 11:38 PM


Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

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4 posted 2003-02-13 11:41 PM


Alyssa, you are a very good poet. I like to read your poetry....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

GG
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Lost in thought
5 posted 2003-02-14 12:39 PM


El Campeador,
Glad you liked them! and thanks for replying. I think those are probably my favorite lines too

Pat,
I always love seeing what other people decipher from my writing. And your definition works quite well. Though when I wrote it, my thoughts were.. a tiger is strong and even a tamed one, you can never completely trust. And I think thats how it is, with soldiers. Who walk in silence, with pained eyes. Kind of spooky!
Glad you enjoyed and replied
hugs and love.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

GG
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Lost in thought
6 posted 2003-02-14 12:43 PM


The Loner,
You know, *sigh* your name always depresses me, but then, I suppose I like being alone most of the time too. Glad you find this to be awesome

Ethel,
awwwwwwww thank you! You are a good poet.. though you never call yourself one, you write from the heart,I do the same. Though I'm lax on replying sometimes.. I love your poetry! thank you for replying.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Albert J. Allie
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7 posted 2003-02-14 01:52 AM


"Much like a tamed lion,
Still never to be trusted
My stride is never caught
Stillness leads me
To hopes of tears.

And I walk"

  Applauding you wildly. This part here gave me chills. I love how your stride is never caught though :-)

GG
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8 posted 2003-02-14 02:14 AM


thank you!
don't believe I've been applauded before, but then, not sure I should be now! Thank you kindly

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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9 posted 2003-02-14 02:27 AM


gosh, this is so true! I can relate!
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10 posted 2003-02-14 08:47 AM


nice work here.. I enjoyed..
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11 posted 2003-02-14 08:59 AM


Alyssa this is such a very true and powerful write.  Trust once given and broken is such a hard thing to get past, this I know all to well right now. Nicely done.  Hugs
GG
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12 posted 2003-02-14 06:15 PM


Dixie,
thank you! its always somewhat chilling when someone can relate.


Cpat,
Glad you enjoyed it! And glad you replied thank you.

Gentle Spirit,
yes, its terrible hard. But we always get the strength.. if we search with open eyes. Glad you find it powerful and true. Thank you

Happy Valentines Day!
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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