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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2003-02-13 02:36 PM

Iambe rubbed her eyes
Half sleep hangover clouding
The reason she couldn’t see

It was dark

Fumbling
She found the light switch
And the lamp’s harsh glare made her wince
As she jostled the shade and exposed the bare bulb.

The clock said 2 AM
In bright red numerals

She shuffled to the shower
Turned it on and let it run
Then headed for the kitchen
And a pot of coffee.

The shower called with
A fog of steam oozing its way
Down the hall
So cup in hand she returned
To thoughts of being clean.

Stripped,
She stepped in and let the water stream
Running down her neck and back
She stuck her head under
And held her breath

Towel felt good
Wrapped around her thin form
And it’s warmth helped stop
The slight shiver of stepping out
Of the steamy womb of water
Into hard tiled silence.

“More Coffee” she heard herself say
and laughed, wondering when it was
she had started talking to herself.

Her robe hung on the door
And she threw it on and with empty cup
Headed for the pot of caffeine her head was
Preaching at her was salvation.

The cup was full, when the knock came
Startling the stuff on the bottom
So that it stood up and ran over the edges

“Who’s there?” She asked.
“Travis” said a voice she hadn’t heard in months

………………………………………………………………………..

I’ve seen the painted desert sitting in the moon
Watched stars above in twinkle to coyote’s tune
I slept one night on needled pine
But more were spent between white lines
Herding this old truck of mine
On my way another place to find

Always you were on my mind
No peace from you did I find

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-02-13 02:42 PM

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

2 posted 2003-02-13 02:42 PM

excellent, I like that you write in series, too poetic to be prose and yet they read like a serial

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-02-13 02:46 PM

“Who’s there?” She asked.
“Travis” said a voice she hadn’t heard in months

=================================

I’ve seen the painted desert sitting in the moon
Watched stars above in twinkle to coyote’s tune
I slept one night on needled pine
But more were spent between white lines
Herding this old truck of mine
On my way another place to find

Always you were on my mind
No peace from you did I find

==========================================

WOO HOO!!!!

The moth is high!!!!

BOUT TIME Travis turned his truck in that drive way!!!!!

flying in your flame poet sir...flying in your flame...

Iambe...smoke and ash girlie...smoke and ash* *L*

" ... and I never saw blue like that before."

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-02-13 03:18 PM

YES!! YES!! YES!! OOOOH MYYYYY!!!!!
All that JM said and more!
And...Travis has his own song!!
~Big Hugs & Smiles~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-02-13 03:21 PM

I haven't been following the series but one doesn't have to in order to enjoy each poem. You put us right in the room. Imagery great. From "the steamy womb of water into hard tiled silence" to the description of the coffee spilling. Not to mention the story line, for that too, in complete enough to form a good idea of what's happening.

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2003-02-13 06:41 PM

A wonderful Valentine gift for us all!!

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

7 posted 2003-02-13 07:38 PM

'Always you were on my mind
No peace from you did I find'

Yep, that's her. Lemme buy ya a beer Ron, been a long day.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

8 posted 2003-02-14 03:28 AM

Enjoyed...got that shower just in time...James

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

9 posted 2003-02-14 08:41 AM

The plot thickens indeed...

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

10 posted 2003-02-14 09:12 AM

That's awesome... sounded like me up until the knock LOL My "travis" was at home in bed...

I will take time to read the series this weekend...

I have a feeling travis coming back is a good thing? LOL

scorpio
Member Ascendant

since 2002-10-02

Posts 5178
right...there

11 posted 2003-02-14 09:28 AM

I sense another adventure...you intrique us with these words on page..wow!!!

believe in what your heart feels...

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