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Konrad – Dana

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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


0 posted 02-12-2003 06:47 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


Konrad – Dana

Sweet sickness is what comes
of migraines – sickening sweet,
honey hung back in your throat
thick,
residual effects of liquid gold
doing nothing to
alleviate
the nausea that took hold
as each muscle grew cold in
tense wait
of another sharp flaming stick
behind the eyes.

Barely breathing, Konrad
did not tempt fate by even thinking
of taking a deep breath,
let alone thinking much.

His only way out of this
was to focus, as he had been told,
by medico after medico,
even when in Mexico,
and he didn’t even
attempt to remove
his boots,
just lay sprawled on the rent-by-night
bed, vaguely smelling of some
lost lust,

and he didn’t try to decipher
whose.

Instead, he brought  
his hand up to his eyes,
shielding them from
the afternoon sun that
edged in behind the flyspecked shade

and thought of Dana.

Dana had been, was, his rock,
a soft rock, his oasis of thought when
all tore at him, and this damned
certificate was tearing at him, all that he had learned,
was grinding his gut as much as the liquid gold,
and the migraine’s nausea,
so he slowly rolled now,
over to the soft thoughts of his rock,

when he last saw her,
tanned and tall, jeaned and sweat-shirted,
glowing with fresh enthusiasm,
almost as tall as he,
not as tall as Jake,
not as tough as Iambe,
perhaps as soft as Dillon…he didn’t know,
it had been some time since he had
seen his Dillon…

and brown eyes.  Auburn hair
and those chocolate eyes, warm and home,
where he would lose himself,
and he pulled
on the liquid of her voice like a rope hung over
a chasm,
bringing himself up to the snug of her memory,
and slowly, slowly,
the migraine eased.

But the certificate
still remained, folded,
waiting, haunting
his siblings tomorrows.


[This message has been edited by Sunshine (02-14-2003 10:37 AM).]

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1 posted 02-12-2003 06:49 PM       View Profile for the_loner_23   Email the_loner_23   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for the_loner_23

I really like this. Full of expression and feeling.

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 02-12-2003 06:51 PM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

(chuckling) well now... you weave even more into this headached nightmare...that in parts read sureal...in parts reads heart..

well... figure the waiting wont kill me..but my head is starting to hurt...

you are indeed setting the stage for a lasting character to emerge... well done.

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3 posted 02-12-2003 06:57 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Karilea.....hurry, hurry...my head's hurting, too...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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4 posted 02-12-2003 09:04 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

ahhh....the plot thickens and a new muse is unveiled....and so...the moth and Jake wait
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5 posted 02-13-2003 04:26 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Okay..Okay...I think I'm caught up now..
and finally understanding the migraine part!
oooh this is so intriguing.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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6 posted 02-13-2003 06:43 PM       View Profile for Robert Frazier   Email Robert Frazier   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Robert Frazier

...eagerly awaiting the next, delicious installment!

Rf
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'But the certificate
still remained, folded,
waiting, haunting
his siblings tomorrows.'

Okay...catching up and moving on.
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8 posted 02-14-2003 10:31 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

I liked this very much, Sunshine... I just hope that powerful description of a migraine is from imagination, not experience. *S*

Excellent story-weaving! *S*

[This message has been edited by suthern (02-14-2003 10:31 AM).]

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9 posted 05-10-2004 05:20 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

they're getting betterer and betterer

loving reading these Karilea....

M xx

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colours, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

 
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