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Open Poetry #24

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gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-02-12 12:20 PM

Silence laid thinly upon black
tingles my spine
arches my back.

Misplaced fear dances in shadows
tripping my steps
won't let me realise
its make believe

Blotting black ink
descending the well
alone i must think.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

1 posted 2003-02-12 12:33 PM

'Blotting black ink
descending the well
alone i must think.'

Great write, I like the desolate feel.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-02-12 12:34 PM

sometimes you gotta be alone to get anything accomplished

Brad Majors

Member Elite

since 2001-04-03

Posts 2647
Georgia

3 posted 2003-02-12 01:04 PM

I really like the way you wrote this one

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-02-12 02:52 PM

Gemma, this is written so well...
It's got lost of emotion in it.....Hope all is well..

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

the_loner_23
Member Ascendant

since 2002-06-08

Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA

5 posted 2003-02-12 02:53 PM

Awesome write

Cold hands means a warm heart

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