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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-02-11 09:23 AM



The Maiden’s Way

She pulls open drapes, allows in the day
Then smiles as the sunbeams give up their rays,
She watches as neighbors go about their chores
Then leans into age, eight decades and more

No one is about to hear her complain
She duly endorses ignoring her pains
Arthritic hands still opens a jar
As with her bright hopes she counts on her stars

Music, news and chatter fills her airwaves,
Slowly fingers old photos she saved,
Reads bits of letters from yesterday’s past
Wonders how time sped by her so fast

Nieces and nephews, her cousins galore
Write to her often, on holidays, more;
They are her family, for them, she prays,
Going about life in Old Maiden ways

She greets all children as hers on the block
They stand around her, engage in small talk
She listens as desires and dreams emerge
She gives each a dollar ~ something to splurge

She tends to her flowers, rids ground of weeds
From her dried posies, removes future’s seed.
A moment’s ponder, on seeds of her own
What they'd be like, had they been sown.

For fate had sent love along her path’s way
He had put country first, went the next day
The attack had been swift, he’d been as fast
For “military might” steeped his young past.

His kiss? A promise; her pledge was his start.
“Never, my dear, will we be so apart,
as not to know when the others' heart sings,”
Then he left after bestowing his ring.

Time passed to a morn when the sun shone bright,
Then swift blackened as grim news faded all light,
Her ring flickered through her great flow of tears,
Her heart was so sore, but not from her fears.

For all she could feel from the very start
Was this full feeling held warm in her heart
“You will know indeed love when my heart sings,
you’ll know it each time you look at my ring.”

~*~

She pulls open drapes, allows in the day
Then smiles as the sunbeams give up their warm rays,
She watches as neighbors go about their chores
She leans into age, eight decades and more

No one is about to hear her complain
She duly endorses ignoring her pain
Arthritic hands move about as she sings
Of a promise, a pledge, of one slender ring.



©Karilea Rilling Jungel
18 January 2002


© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
Susan Caldwell
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1 posted 2003-02-11 09:28 AM


Wow.  This was moving and beautiful.  

Susan C.

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2 posted 2003-02-11 09:30 AM


very well done my friend.. well done indeed.
then you know I expect that when I open one of your posts....

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2003-02-11 10:08 AM


Very well done indeed lady...this piece shines...
Bill Charles
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4 posted 2003-02-11 10:42 AM


Sunshine - a most beautiful writing, as you do...

BC

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5 posted 2003-02-11 10:47 AM


Karilea, I felt as though I was looking over her shoulder....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Jason Lyle
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6 posted 2003-02-11 11:03 AM


Wow, this piece inspires.....nice work.

Robert Frazier
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7 posted 2003-02-11 11:05 AM


Sunshine,  I am blown away!  What story!  What an awesome piece of poetry!  Have you ever written any short stories?  If so, let me know where I might find them.

Rf

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8 posted 2003-02-11 11:20 AM


I love how you do stories.....the feelings you put into each piece are priceless.... hugsssss


Lauren~

I sing to life
To it's tragic beauty
To pain and strife
Let all that dances through me
The rise and the fall, I lived through it all

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