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When He Calls Me Home
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When He Calls Me Home |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Your argument came stealing, thief in night Hidden somewhere between the shadowed moon Watched as the stars disappeared from my sight To be with you, would come to be me soon For it is written, believed among many Saving Grace, gathers my very breath today One, but three, I believe in trinity Yet some still reject Him, turn Him away I cannot, shall not, wait no more, when time Becomes only a distant, vapor trail Will watch as my Spirit rejoices in rhyme Off to meet Jesus, my wings I must sail My prayers, your prayers, are answered true for you That His Grace, and His Love, calls you home too Note*My Son came home today, and said his homework was he had to write a Sonnet. After asking me if I would do it for him (He has a 5:45 AM Hockey Practice) and I agreeing to this he explained to me how to do it. "It has to be fourteen lines Dad, and it goes AB,AB,CD,CD, EF, EF, and GG" he said. At this moment I realized I had never written a sonnet, and now, after four hours, I realize why Anyway, here it is. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yeah Dad...I'm sure the teacher will believe your son really did this...*giggle* |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You realize, of course, that if your son's instructor is a member of Passions, and sees that you did this work, and your son turns it in, he will be guilty of plagarizing?  Put homework before hockey, Dad...  |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
well putting aside that his teacher won't believe he wrote it and he'll be plageurizing...  I love the poem! Home.. sourrounded by true Family. Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
LOL - True Confessions here... There are other variations in rhyme scheme that can be used in sonnets as well. The ababcdcdefefgg format is the classic Shakespearean for. It should also be written in iambic pentameter, btw.. You've come close here... Close...  I enjoyed... |
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Brad Majors 
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
yes i don't think he'll pass this one off as his own but its very good non the less |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Dennis, besides from the fact that doing your son'n homework for him being a nono,  this is a very good poem.....just reminds me that I've got to go to some of Nan's classes...... "Love makes the world go around" |
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dhicks03 Member
since 2002-12-26
Posts 267Missouri,USA |
Thank you all! Well, this was tougher than I thought, and I did cheat, As Nan I went into your school and read about sonnets My son after getting 5 hours sleep, read it this morning. I had told him his teacher would know he didn't write it, he said "no she won't, she's dumber than a box of rocks" to which I said,"that's not very nice". We both sort of had a chuckle, so it remains to be seen if she catchs on or not. This was very hard, my first attempt. Thank you Nan for giving the directions. Dennis |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
he he 'dumber than a box of rocks'really made me laugh. Dennis, What a lovely dad you are, and you wouldn't be able to guess in a million years it was your first attempt at a sonnet. I'm impressed! lots of love, gemma xxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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