" A grieving heart" re: susan caldwells "a little girls cry"

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Open Poetry #24

" A grieving heart" re: susan caldwells "a little girls cry"

shannon harter
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since 2003-02-03

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waesaw,IN USA

0 posted 2003-02-10 12:14 PM

"A grieving heart"

your the very reason why im here
your the very reason for my fear

i have every right to hate what you are
and to hate you even more, for leaving my scars

but you make me laugh,you make me smile
and to re-write the past, you would walk that extra mile.

but now i dont trust as well as i could
and never will i love you as much as i should.

you hurt my other self, there for you hurt me
as you gave into sickness,
now i give in to grief.

a response poem to my sister's "a little girls cry" by susan caldwell

the_loner_23
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since 2002-06-08

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Jacksonville, Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-02-10 12:14 PM

This is very good

Cold hands means a warm heart

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

2 posted 2003-02-10 12:21 PM

The reality of "lost" trust...sad indeed!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

3 posted 2003-02-10 12:44 PM

So much heartache and pain in this one. Loss of trust in a friend or family member is so hard to get past, yet holding onto grief and anger only makes the hurt sink deeper into your inner being. Find a way, if you can, to forgive even if you cannot forget.

passing shadows
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displaced

4 posted 2003-02-10 02:21 AM

the ending is just the icing on the cake! perfect!

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2003-02-10 08:22 AM

Dearest "Other Self,"

Thank you for loving me so much. My life would not be complete without you.

The poetic bug must be genetic!

Love you, Euwy

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

6 posted 2003-02-10 08:24 AM

Deeply felt.
Beautiful writing.
Eric

Brad Majors

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since 2001-04-03

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Georgia

7 posted 2003-02-10 11:29 AM

A very good response!

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

8 posted 2003-02-10 06:28 PM

Well done!! So when do we see a duet with you both? That would be cool!

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