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majnu
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0 posted 2003-02-09 09:39 PM



Receiver

Whoever the giver may be,
I am the taker, the receiver.
To few now see -  
They see the green, the gold, myriad colours' might,
Yet they do not See!

In explaining to others I grow weak,
And before the beauty they yawn in disinterest.

I am full -
Full of pain and grief;
And in my manhood tears cannot provide release;
Were the filling joy,
In typical human fashion I could expand,
Expecting and demanding more,
But the grief pours in without outlet in me;
Perhaps this too will cause an expansion -  
I fear so, for this is much, is too much, to bear;

In the pale light of a dimming bulb my mind creates a message for future peoples -  
  It is hidden even from me.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

© Copyright 2003 Zaheer Abbas Ali - All Rights Reserved
Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-02-09 09:45 PM


Profound write leaving plenty for the reader to ponder here.
Well done.
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-02-09 11:46 PM


Methinks you left me thinking!--and that's a good thing!

Valentine hugs,
EA

the_loner_23
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3 posted 2003-02-09 11:50 PM


I like this

Cold hands means a warm heart

Midnitesun
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4 posted 2003-02-10 01:00 AM


Maybe it's time to stop 'splainin and go out and have some fun under a different light bulb?
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5 posted 2003-02-10 02:17 AM


awesome writing! loved this very much! a definate keeper
majnu
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6 posted 2003-02-10 10:46 AM


thanks for the compliments.

enchantress, profundity eh, my head is swelling.

EA, glad to help with the mental aerobics.

loner, ty for the read.

midnitesun, explaining? who's doing that. if I don't write and get transfer this stuff from my head to the page i might go whacko.

PS, thanks for the look.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

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