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0 posted 2003-02-09 01:33 PM



Mimosa Pudica

Touch it,
Only touch it,
One sensitive leaf, and--
It wilts like an umbrella; like
This man.

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1 posted 2003-02-09 01:34 PM


Beautiful

Cold hands means a warm heart

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2 posted 2003-02-09 01:37 PM


One of my favorite plants, but its personality IS a bit too close to mine, for comfort.....

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3 posted 2003-02-09 02:04 PM


Ed--There is alot of power in a cinquain when done right...this is done right.  Enjoyed!
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4 posted 2003-02-11 12:16 PM


Very well done!
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5 posted 2003-02-11 12:24 PM


nicely done... question though...
not familiar with the form and the rules so it may be a part of those that require using "like" twice in the verse..if so..pardon my ignorance..if not..that is the only thing I found distracting in the whole... it is well done either way..and I enjoyed.

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6 posted 2003-02-11 12:31 PM




It is great to see various forms used when writing poetry. I have to say I enjoyed the sentiment in the poem greatly.

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7 posted 2003-02-11 12:34 PM


I think the "right" touch would turn the wilt to melt.

I liked this.

Susan C.

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8 posted 2003-02-11 12:59 PM


*mouth hanging open*
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