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0 posted 2003-02-08 07:27 PM




~~~ ~~~
The sky wore
a suit of
grey flannel
to-day.
Clouds heavy laden
with snow
without wind
crawled their way.
Over the river
frozen in time.
It's shoreline
a necklace of
artistry sublime.
Over the trees
now just stick people
sketches.
Stiff, licorice
telephone wire,
and the voices
it catches.
Like drab,
bloated pillows,
as day becomes
night,
the clouds
an ashen
backdrop
for geese
in their flight.
From invisible pockets
lace confetti
is shaken.
Sugar coating
the earth -
Gift for
our eyes
when we
waken.
~~



Chris Barker
Feb.2002
~~~~~~~~~~


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1 posted 2003-02-08 07:32 PM


This was bea-u-ti-ful. I just thought that you worded this and described the scene amazingly well.

I love Winter. I fall in love in Winter... (it's in the snow). With something. There's always something.

Thank you for posting this.

- Jaime

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2 posted 2003-02-08 07:37 PM




(smiles) Yay!!! Oh Chris, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love winter, though spring is my favorite season, because everything blooms then, but I love winter because of the closeness and purity! (kiss on cheek) I'm so happy you're feeling better, yay, more orange juice hugs from me to you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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3 posted 2003-02-08 07:40 PM


Jiame - Thankyou so much!!

Noah - thankyou for the orange juice hugs and the warm comments. I am feeling abit better - yippee!! hugs!

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4 posted 2003-02-08 07:46 PM


It's shoreline
a necklace of
artistry sublime.
Over the trees
now just stick people
sketches.
Stiff, licorice
telephone wire,
and the voices
it catches.
---------------------
Hey little sister!!
You're feeling better!  Great!
I know...I know...you're asking why I chose these lines..
Well, I think "Stiff, licorice..rang a memory bell...
Then,
"stick people sketches"
Well...because..of our artistry?
You know how well we can draw!

Good to have you back on board!
Loved this post.
Love and miss ya, Teed.

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

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5 posted 2003-02-08 07:49 PM


Chris--Beautiful imagery...especially liked: "Stiff, licorice
telephone wire," and "bloated pillows".  

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6 posted 2003-02-08 07:59 PM


Nancylee - yes! Remember the licorice in the powder in the bag? From the store near Nan's house? The store where you used to eat most of MY icecream cone?!! Anyway...I am getting better at last...still tired out though. Miss ya and love ya, Chris   p.s. Stick people? lol. YOU draw them!!

Martie - thankyou sweet lady for reading and commenting! hugs!!

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7 posted 2003-02-08 08:13 PM


You've done it again, I am allways so captivated by your poetry.

I am living proof that ghosts exist. Which is an oximoron but I don't care ;)

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8 posted 2003-02-08 08:19 PM


Well, what a pleasant surprise. Hello Wind!!
Thankyou for your sweet comment.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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9 posted 2003-02-08 08:29 PM


Chris - a'hhhhh, nice cuddling weather...

BC

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10 posted 2003-02-08 08:33 PM


Hi Bill !! Yes, it is indeed. Thanks for commenting.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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11 posted 2003-02-08 08:34 PM


I love the images you created here, Chris...you found a way of making this long, cold, grey winter beautiful..

believe in what your heart feels...

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12 posted 2003-02-08 09:24 PM


scorpio - thankyou so much. I think that a fresh coating of snow makes things just abit brighter.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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13 posted 2003-02-08 09:43 PM


You paint the scenery so well,
makes me wish I could have been there.

Thank you for letting me see all the
beauty through your eyes.

Very very nice writing Chris~

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14 posted 2003-02-08 09:45 PM


blues!! How nice of you to stop by. Yes, I wish you could have been here to see the falling snow too. Thanks.
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15 posted 2003-02-08 10:49 PM


Chris, I love the way you wrote this. The
descriptions are really good. I loved it.....
I also like to read about the experiences that you and Nancy Lee
had when you two were growing up. Ya'll should write
some poetry about those times. I would love to read them...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (02-08-2003 11:25 PM).]

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16 posted 2003-02-09 02:20 AM


this is beautiful! not what I expected from the title, but truly impressed!
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17 posted 2003-02-09 10:31 AM


Ethel - Thankyou so much. I think that if Nancylee and I were to write about our experiences as children, some might shake their heads in disbelief....lol. But, that's a good idea you have.

passing - thankyou for reading and commenting.

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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