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Red Curtain
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Red Curtain |
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Jaime
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Red Curtain My curtain’s soiled and tattered, Taking the weather of too much blood and oil and dust and flood and crushed, crushed sunglasses I put them on the floor and you said ‘I would expect you to, that’s just like you’ and I thought you just don’t know your lady, your pal These are just names you associate with familiar tits and smile, My teeth print on your skin when you scream and you scream, But I never get through You’ve never seen me in the light, You’ve never seen the pale, and I think that this is going to be hell in my heels And I’m not shaving, I’m not shaving for you anymore I want my own skin, I want my own Ice cream, I want my own babies, I want My own splinter pain He said, ‘I was afraid he would change you and mellow you out, girl you’re doing fine, just fine’ and I thought How many people am I screwing here? Lined up with their cigarettes, raiding my fridge Get out of my bed Get out of my bed We’ll see you run, and I know you’ll run When the curtain doesn’t come 2.8.03 ----------------------------------------------- I just popped this one out so give it some time to wipe the blood off and get a good look around.(The mother is always overly-anxious.) a man of quality is not threatened by a woman of equality [This message has been edited by Jaime (02-08-2003 07:27 PM).] |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Passionate write with a raw edge to it.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sun of faith Member
since 2003-01-31
Posts 101 |
i loved it, interesting way of writing |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
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These are just names you associate with familiar tits and smile, My teeth print on your skin when you scream and you scream, But I never get through You’ve never seen me in the light, You’ve never seen the pale, and I think that this is going to be hell in my heels And I’m not shaving, I’m not shaving for you anymore ================================ whoa...and damn..... your words bleed like written with razors. powerful writing poetess Jaime ...indeed. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
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Excellent....so original. Eric |
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Barbara Trautman Member
since 2002-10-23
Posts 90 |
What can I say? Wow! Really got through to me. It's rough around the edges and rough to take but I liked it. Courage! Keep coming through with stuff like this. Barb |
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Jaime
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Thank you all... I know my style can be a little difficult to understand at times (I'm still smiling about the yellow cowboys) so I appreciate you reading it anyway. - Jaime the faeries creep into my hair at night leaving it in terrible knots |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very raw, and strong |
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