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rm711
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0 posted 2003-02-08 06:00 PM



Do you know
How pointless
Life would be
Alone
Locked in a cell
My only hell
Restricted
I can’t breathe alone
I can’t be alone
How can I sleep
Alone

Loneliness
Deafens me
Visually impaired
I can’t taste life
Anymore
Loss of senses
Destroys me
Breaks me down
Sprawled out
On the floor
I cry out for no more

Lack of sleep
Delirious
Shaking sets in
I can’t cry
My eyes are dry
There’s no colour
Without tears
Fear of nothing
But fear
Itself
Please help

I long to sense
A presence
Even in my mind
But that’s left behind
In the world
I can no longer
Breathe with
You took my freedom
You took my dignity
You took my senses
You took my air

Jailed
Death.

small insignificant useless me

© Copyright 2003 Rosie Mitchell - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-02-08 06:49 PM


Rosie, please don't give away the key to your cell.

Jaime
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2 posted 2003-02-08 07:52 PM


Now take it back.

Very good poem... it had a falling affect to it.. like the words were being read and then falling as the next one appeared.

- Jaime

a man of quality is not threatened by a woman of equality

Sun of faith
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since 2003-01-31
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3 posted 2003-02-08 10:02 PM


Great Great write!!! I loved it so much, great use of words and feeling, and It kept me wanting more. It was so easy to read yet thought provoking. Well done!!!
passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-02-09 02:40 AM


I used to feel this way...till I was alone for awhile.
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