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Black Swan
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since 2003-02-05
Posts 165
on the moon

0 posted 2003-02-07 01:36 AM


poor it on thick
oozing sinful sweetness
oozing desire for the weak hearted
bitter sweet
temptation falls over me
Iam stuck
too far gone
situation most sticky
smothers my soul
drowns my thought
level-headedness corrupted
my heart pulls hard on me
my body wants more
sweet warmth passifies
blurs my judgement
all i can see is softeness
all i can hear is my own happiness
trapped
comfortably muffled
dont talk to me!
you know your smile kills me.
dont touch me!
you know i love it.

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Sun of faith
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 101

1 posted 2003-02-07 01:40 AM


Very intence, i have been in that situation, i know how you feel, and you have portrayed that feeling very well in this poem.
Nice write!

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178

2 posted 2003-02-07 09:04 AM


Powerful and moving.
Eric

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2003-02-08 01:08 AM



Black Swan~
This is quite a powerful piece.
I enjoyed the read.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
4 posted 2003-02-09 09:34 PM


It's like saying, no no no, more more more.

Enjoyed your candid thoughts Black Swan~
Welcome to the blue pages by the way!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
5 posted 2003-02-10 02:53 AM


isnt it wonderful?
Black Swan
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since 2003-02-05
Posts 165
on the moon
6 posted 2003-02-10 04:09 AM


frightingly and horribly wonderful :P
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