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Forgetting Susan
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Forgetting Susan |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Forgetting Susan When the one he loved said goodbye, he bought himself a sailboat and named her “Lazy Susan.” He polishes her up on weekends; sails around the marina, wishes he could set her adrift. Looking inside for answers reflects only shadows, a question he pushes aside - was he the problem? He polishes off a bottle of Merlot to forget; shovels papers around his work week; gradually, it dawns - he gave importance to everything but love. Now he climbs aboard her polished skin every Friday night, his heart capsized. © 2003 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (02-06-2003 02:42 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I typed half a page of comments here and deleted them... left for people better suited to speak volumes..I'll say I enjoyed the form and the tight construction and the subject left me drifting in thought... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This seems to be a day of me touching on certain poems and being left speechless... But then, you do that to me quite often, and very well. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Aw, Ron - I would have loved to see your comments! Sunshine - thank you, sweet one! Cor |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Beautifully written. M |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
his heart capsized. A terrific write. Thank you. Maree  |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, I also don't really know what to say. This one made me have a lot of thoughts going around in my head..... some of them were probably your intentions, some not. I really enjoyed this one and will read it again and again.....  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I'm with cpat, so i'll just say wow |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
The term "Lazy Susan" has always made me roll my eyes in dispair.... Very nice write and so often true. Susan C. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Corinne, it is so hard to forget, this reminded me of the saying "One drink to remember and another to forget!", I forget who first said that but I hear it all the time and you bring this haunting nostalgia back! (sigh) This is touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
loved this...and Lazy Susan....that is a running joke at my house... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh WOW Cor! I love this..tight, compact.. and says so very much. ~Hugs~ ~ Trace my body with your words.. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
"gradually, it dawns - he gave importance to everything but love." Sad, and too often, so very true..well done!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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