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gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
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Pencilveinia, USA

0 posted 2003-02-06 08:20 AM



I'm hanging on wall
I've been here for years
dust lies inches thick
my colours cease to breathe
i'm living
just by clinging to solitary nail.

If a door should catch the breeze
as it opens
would i fall down
or become askew?
no,

It reaches my grey exterior
and wipes me cleaner
tended to
filtering through
clogged gaps in my mind.

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

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abbe
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since 2003-01-20
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michigan, usa
1 posted 2003-02-06 08:27 AM


i altogether love this...
it paints a very clear picture of where i feel i hang sometimes... and if not for a blessed breeze now and then, i'd become such a part of life's cobwebs as not to be discerned hanging among them.

thanks for this picture

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31
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2 posted 2003-02-06 10:10 AM


Very descriptive.
Eric

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-02-06 12:01 PM


Gemma, this isn't like your usual up-beat happy
poetry, but I like it anyway. You described it well...

passing shadows
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displaced
4 posted 2003-02-06 12:32 PM


very nice...I liked this a lot...a sad tone to it...
nakdthoughts
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5 posted 2003-02-06 01:36 PM


I liked this too...if I passed you by I would straighten the frame (if crooked) and admire the picture's beauty.
M

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