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Glaze of Gaze
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Glaze of Gaze |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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You parted my lips and went beyond my smile where you laid behind eyes tasting the salt in my tears you reached my heart and have seen my soul bare without changing the mold. Melding your hands along the curves you have had me at your mercy pressing against the edges to fit my ill form when the weight of the world is more than I can take shaping my vision with your insight. Embracing the complexity and the context of my chemistry interwoven in the mystery stabilized in fahrenheit tempering the elements surrounding my life. You are the die, cast in a smokey haze brushing fingertips touch a smooth glaze of gaze glossing over the finish that leaves a burning sensation sparked by the fiery flames. ~*~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (02-06-2003 02:00 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I can see the finished piece! awesome! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Hon this is pure Blues Serenade at her best....this is just beautiful and woven so very well! Hugs to you. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, ___________________________________________ You parted my lips and went beyond my smile where you laid behind eyes tasting the salt in my tears ___________________________________________ What an awesome line. And an even better poem. Packaged with much truth, except for the "ill form" part!  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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abbe Member
since 2003-01-20
Posts 131michigan, usa |
well written... and what a great friend to have, to see beyond the surface to the you, and be there.. i love this poem, i only envy you the friend. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
beautifully done... I truly enjoy reading your words..I always know there is a treasure in them.. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lori, you truly are a glass blower of precious words, sweet friend, from tears we can always make porcelain, that is in my mind real poetic justice! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, Perfect! Enjoyed this from the title all the way through to finish. Wonderful lines talently expressed. Loved it! Hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, I love this. You have a beautiful way with words, Lady.....  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori--A grand love can do this and you have expressed it so beautifully and passionately. Hugs! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you all for putting up with my wishy washy! Maybe one of these days I'll get it right and learn to be consistant! Maybe, being the keyword! |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I thought for sure I already had told you, this is wonderful |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
APPLAUSE!!!!!!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ This is the prettiest piece I will read this day ..... perhaps this month~ Purely perfect~ You've such a lovely wishy-washy way with word-thoughts~ Don't change a thing~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a smooth glaze of gaze ..that's for sure... that's what my eyes feel when they read you, Lori. hugss M ( I haven't gotten off here all day...guess I will have my work cut out for me if...) |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for always reading me SEA gal. Sandpiper~ I appreciate your applause~ in caps no less!! Margie~ I can't tell you how good it is to see you here and how much your sweet reply means to me. Thank you Marge, I've missed you and your poetry. Hugging you back~ Maureen~ Timing is everything...we're like a couple ships passing in the night. Thank you for your unconditional friendship Maureen. Love and hugs~ |
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