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Dark Angel
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0 posted 2003-02-05 03:42 PM




You are different
from what one is used to
keeping house below time and a thistle
in your wild shoes over wild roots
where love has fallen
over wounded ground.

You are of summer
mature, warm
rarer than wealth in this age
of the mad-man of hatred and greed.

You are of none of these

but an architect of peace
a cathedral of dreams

and like a gentle breeze
you came to me down under the
bend of fall
weaving your life around mine
binding poems into my hair


© Copyright 2003 Dark Angel - All Rights Reserved
Jaime
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1 posted 2003-02-05 03:48 PM


"and like a gentle breeze
you came to me down under the
bend of fall
weaving your life around mine
binding poems into my hair"

I really like this a lot. Your descriptions were excellent.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

Severn
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2 posted 2003-02-05 03:51 PM


...

well

speechless

this is just...can't even look at it critically - it's just superb mmy, superb...masterful even - let me return the compliment..

hugs my sweet soul sister...you've done well with this one..

K

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3 posted 2003-02-05 03:52 PM


damn....

your talent is showing..and glad I stopped to stare...



Janet Marie
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4 posted 2003-02-05 04:01 PM


but an architect of peace
a cathedral of dreams

and like a gentle breeze
you came to me down under the
bend of fall
weaving your life around mine
binding poems into my hair


=====================================

I just love your poetry...you have a distinctive style of creating rich images and textures with your words...as well as gift with personification and expression and do it all with tight, succinct, poetry.
My only complaint is that you dont post often enough
Excellent writing !!!  


WhiteRose
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5 posted 2003-02-05 04:04 PM


Wow!! This is a wonderul write Maree. I'm so glad I looked in here and found this caress of verse. It's lovely
Martie
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6 posted 2003-02-05 04:08 PM


Maree--This really is exceptional, rich poetry.  Good to see you!  Hugs!
Aenimal
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7 posted 2003-02-05 09:55 PM


beautiful
Mistletoe Angel
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8 posted 2003-02-05 11:47 PM




(smiles) Oh Maree, this reminded me of the beautiful Red Hot Chili Peppers song "The Zephyr Song", I LOVE IT!!!

"Fly away on my zephyr
I feel it more than ever
And in this perfect weather
We'll find a place together"

From The Zephyr Song
Red Hot Chili Peppers- By The Way: 2002




(smiles) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, may you always soar with love in your heart, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maree, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Dark Angel
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9 posted 2003-02-06 03:43 PM


Jaime
thank you for your lovely reply and the "excellent". Thanks for stopping by.

Kamla
hmmm I have you speechless? well that is a very hard thing to do LOL...no seriously, thank you so much and I'm glad you enjoyed
it.

Cpat
thank you so much. I'm glad you stopped to stare as well.

Janet Marie
It's always lovely to see you and read your lovely replies. Thank you.
My only complaint is that you dont post often enough Believe me that is mine too. If it doesnt come it doesnt come... shrug. Thanks again and hugs.

Ms Rose,
Thanks for caressing me with your sweet reply and hug. (f)

Martie,
sweet lady, thank you for stopping by and reading me and for your always loving replies. hugs.

Aenimal
Thankyou Handsome.

Noah
Thank you so much glad you enjoyed.

Poet deVine
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10 posted 2003-02-06 07:47 PM


Ah....now this is good. One of your best Maree!! It's nice to see you here.
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Gaia
11 posted 2003-02-06 08:06 PM


This is stunningly beautiful.
Keeping this one safe in my library.

Aimster
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12 posted 2003-02-06 08:40 PM


Maree-

long time my sweet friend! i've missed seeing your work and talking to you. i am sorry i've not been around lately. this is as always just
beautiful. your imagery and description through the years i've known you has only gotten better & better with time. im not sure im here to stay at Pips, but im glad i saw this. take care sweetie. feel free to drop me a email if you get time. truelove7677@netzero.com. bye for now
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

JamesMichael
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13 posted 2003-02-07 12:29 PM


Interesting concept..."binding poems into my hair."   James
Jamie
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14 posted 2003-02-07 12:01 PM


One of those you just can't stop reading. One of your best Mmy, and very beautiful.

Hugs

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Dark Angel
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15 posted 2003-02-07 03:19 PM


Sharon,
thank you lovely lady, it's nice to see you here too

Mitnitesun:
hey thank you for your lovely reply and for adding to your library.

Ms Amy:
Wow, where have you been? Nice to see you here hon. Thank you for yor lovely reply. And... stop changing that email addy.

JamesMichael:
Thank you for stopping by and having a read. Glad you found it interesting.

Jamie, how ae you sweetie, Thank you for your lovely reply and compliment. Nice to see you here.

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