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a bite of snow

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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 02-05-2003 08:56 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

the sting of winterís bite
struck such a sense of fear
that even mercury,
the ever positive
refused to slide heavenwards
and remained rooted
to the bottom of its bulb
climb forsaken and
glory renounced

even the pond outside
appeared to be terrorised
forced into submission
by strong arctic winds
while the trees around
revealed their thin skeletons
covered by whiteness
of snowy dressings

thatís when a flying saucer came
and hit me on my face
thus had begun
the war of snowballs
and the score was
neighbourís kid one : me zero

I stood snowballed
and in deep thought:
no winter can ever freeze
the rage of a seven year old
and no gloom can ever stale
the natural pluck of a child

I stood nodding
True.
© Copyright 2003 Sudhir Iyer - All Rights Reserved
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and then you rounded some ice
and threw, yes?

Sudhir!  so glad to have you home!
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2 posted 02-05-2003 09:21 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

"I stood snowballed
and in deep thought:
no winter can ever freeze
the rage of a seven year old
and no gloom can ever stale
the natural pluck of a child

I stood nodding
True."


Ah Sudhir..this is wonderful!
The playfulness of children and the bite of winter.
Excellent...and much enjoyed.
So good to see you back.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

Cpat Hair
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3 posted 02-05-2003 09:32 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

ah... nice to read you again and I enjoyed this perspective. The beginning seems to set a mood, that is broken in a light hearted sort of way..seriously... nicely done..

now... neighbor kids are meant to be terrorized... unwritten rule..they aren't yours and annoying them is great sport. Always allow them to win a few rounds..but surprise them with your ability to plan and carry out massive counter attacks..that leave them laughing...

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 02-05-2003 09:51 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sudhir,
Glad to see you back. Well done, enjoyed the read.
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even the pond outside
appeared to be terrorised
forced into submission
by strong arctic winds
**********************
Sheesh, do I ever understand that one!
LOL at this snowball episode.
Keep your guard up.

It's sad the world leaders and terrorists have something much more sinister in their arsenals than snowballs.

Titia Geertman
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Ahh Sudhir, snowballs in your face...a must for every seven year old LOL

But beautiful it was, though I got stuck for three hours when I tried to feed my sheep.

Love your poem, as always

Titia

Like scattered leaves...my words will flow

Severn
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One of the most linear poems I've seen from you...I started to think 'or maybe not' when I read the flying saucer line but it all made sense in the end hehehehe...

This is a strong piece of work m'friend..I'd cut out the last two lines though...re Duncan's poem 'Over Coffee' to find out why I think that...

K
Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 02-18-2003 04:23 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Thank you all so very much, my dear friends...

and yes, Kamla, I would think of dropping the last two lines too...

Regards,
sudhir
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Enjoyed...snowball fight...James
Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 02-21-2003 02:34 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Thank you muchly James...

regards,
sudhir
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enjoyed
Sudhir Iyer
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Thank you Vandana...

regards,
sudhir
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And many a snowball fight was had!
Recalls fond memories.
Sudhir Iyer
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Thanks a lot, my friend...

regards,
sudhir
 
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