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GG
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0 posted 2003-02-05 12:53 PM




All right, you asked,
So now I’ll tell,
I plan on living life
Real well.

But don’t we all?
And thus I fear...
So I’ll make this answer
Much more clear.

I’ll drop from school
In a bit
Get a job, and, well…
That’s it.

Oh! But I plan to
Start on drugs.
I’ll lose my friends
And hang with thugs.

And then I’ll just
Get some dough
From unrealistic
Family foe.

I’ll have a baby
Raise him well
In the great lifestyle
Of my new hell.

Did I mention
I’d forever suffer
From brain damage
‘Cause of snuffer?

And Oh, I’ll die
Before too long,
Helplessly trying
To change my wrongs.

So there you have it,
Great display
Of life for me…
The only way!

(completely fake. Its the way I've seen too many, and some close to me, live. But I can never give a completely straight answer!)

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

© Copyright 2003 GG - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-02-05 01:04 AM


Alyssa,

Smiling here, though not a laughing matter. You could not do that if you wanted.  But, sadly so many kids do just that...it is heartbreaking..... I've also seen them come out of it and have a productive life....you captured well what does happen to many...

Hugs and love, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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2 posted 2003-02-05 01:09 AM


Alyssa, I would have known it was fake, even if you hadn't told us. From your poetry and replies, I can tell that you aren't like that. but, if I hadn't got to know you some on here, I would have wondered if it was from your personal experiences, because you wrote of it very well. Thank you for sharing your poem...

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

GG
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3 posted 2003-02-05 01:13 AM


Actually, you could go three quarters of the way down the list and be following my sisters life.
No, not a laughing matter at all.
And your right I couldn't if I tried, which is comforting in its own way.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

GG
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4 posted 2003-02-05 01:28 AM


And thank you both for thinking so highly of me!
I'll have to get back to you Pat on all the college stuff. First I'll make the next five seconds... And then the next...


Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-02-05 02:38 AM


wow...I've seen it too many times myself...great piece!
GG
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6 posted 2003-02-05 09:56 AM


Thanks for taking the time to read and reply, Dixie, Appreciated

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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7 posted 2003-02-06 08:47 AM


you handled this sarcastic slant like  a pro.  it is a good way to deal with such an issue.  it takes a good writer to do it well, tounge in cheek, and still get the impact of the message across.

good job

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8 posted 2003-02-06 08:53 AM


GG
Good write, bad read. LOL

GG
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9 posted 2003-02-06 09:41 AM


abbe,
thats a big compliment there! *looks around* you sure it was for me? ...thanks much! I appreciate it.

Sey,
This is one of those times I'm reallly glad it was a bad read LoL, thanks for replying.

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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10 posted 2003-02-06 05:17 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Alyssa, this is son very sad, sweet friend, I have many around me who live like this and never seek help, or at least no one sympathizes with them! (sadn sigh) There's a mom two blocks up from me who gives pit to their kids and got arrested recently and they have no dad so now they be put up for orphanage! My prayers and angel hugs are out to the all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Alyssa, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

GG
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11 posted 2003-02-06 05:37 PM


Noah,
its so sad to hear about that, and knowing and seeing so many other cases so similar. And its ~strange~ knowing I could have taken my life in that direction too.
But I have been blessed, and I can only offer a hand and prayer out to those others.. and sometimes a good thump does some good.
Thanks much for your reply

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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