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Bluer Than Blue
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Bluer Than Blue |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA 
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Bluer than blue Are the waters of the ocean Bluer than blue Are the clouds in the sky As we raise Our heads high Bluer than blue Are your eyes That I look into So intently Bluer than blue Are my favorite things In this life Cold hands means a warm heart [This message has been edited by the_loner_23 (02-04-2003 10:05 PM).] |
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*Star* Junior Member
since 2003-02-03
Posts 32Iowa |
 A great poem, I look for your work now A gentle suggestion: You may want to change "Is" to "Are" so that it agrees with your plural nouns Bluer than blue Is (Are?) your eyes That I look into So intently Bluer than blue (Are?) my favorite things In this life |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Julie, this is lovely, sweet friend, I know this feeling of looking in ones eyes too, even when the green emerald smile of my sweetheart has went to gray! (big hugggsssssss) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Julie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
..........or with no "is" or "are" at all..... I like this just as well with 'em or without 'em...... You have a good eye. Like Star, I look for you. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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ThunderMage Senior Member
since 2002-06-20
Posts 812Canada |
I love this poem.  What is life without poetry and adventure? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes...nice write! |
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