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Dr Pepper Freak
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0 posted 2003-02-03 02:19 PM


We are in a vast, inevasible well of souls.

Like silver rivulets, we flow silently
through massive darkness.
No blood or root, or history
impedes our benighted urging.
With other, unpathed waters we emerge
in a ceaseless tide of giving
and giving up.

The well, our abyss, has boundaries
defied and defined beneath the incessant pumping,
our instinctive breathing,
the drawing and the draining of many littlelives it holds.

We claim
these littlelives and countless hours,
the little destinies carved and fulfilled
in the arms of this well-scarred darkness:
the ordinary, the doubtful,
those lacking anguish,
those without grace.

We, littlelives, we are
the lovers of passing days and desires.

It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne

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Brad Majors
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1 posted 2003-02-03 02:26 PM


Very cool piece!
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2 posted 2003-02-03 04:25 PM


Great words...with a wonderful ending!
Eric

ThisDiamond
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3 posted 2003-02-03 07:57 PM


Magnificent weave. ThisDiamond
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4 posted 2003-02-03 08:13 PM


May the well that fills your pen with ink never run dry
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 2003-02-04 11:23 PM


we are
the lovers of passing days and desires.

Hmmmm nice, I like your signature too DP~

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6 posted 2003-02-05 01:13 AM


Dr. Pepper,
this is really good writing. I enjoyed reading it....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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7 posted 2003-02-05 02:37 AM


I thoroughly enjoyed this
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8 posted 2003-02-05 02:42 AM


wow, this is a thinker for sure. And I'm still in thought.
I like this immensely

Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

Black Swan
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9 posted 2003-02-05 06:13 PM


i always enjoyed throwing pennies down a well and making wishes. "We are in a vast, inevasible well of souls" thats an excellent and creative analogy of life. ~Talia
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10 posted 2003-02-06 08:38 AM


My goodness, this is packed with lots to think about.

i really like this

"the little destinies carved and fulfilled
in the arms of this well-scarred darkness:
the ordinary, the doubtful,
those lacking anguish,
those without grace."

and i love the end.... these littlelives (us) "the lovers of passing days and desires"  yeah, i want to be counted as a lover of passing days and desires...and  drink my well dry!


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11 posted 2003-02-06 05:07 PM




(sigh) This is so very true, sweet friend, we must hang onto our desires and hopes as they will help us crawl through any darkness or escape any portcullis! (big hugggsssssss) This is precious, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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12 posted 2003-02-06 05:12 PM


Wow.  That was incredible.  Very powerful words.

Beautiful.

Thank you!

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