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seven_conscious
Junior Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 33

0 posted 2003-02-02 10:07 PM

     How long has it been since I’ve
become numb?  My heart has fallen
       into sleep, and from deep in
                my soul I wonder if love
       can stir me again.  Then, with
                   a smile, I think of you...

[This message has been edited by seven_conscious (02-03-2003 01:11 AM).]

christian
Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 331

1 posted 2003-02-02 11:44 PM

the first line is inviting.

'how long has it been since i've been numb'

and the last line is such a great way
to wrap it up.

my only complaint. maybe everything in
between, a little too short for my taste
but i can't complain, because i did like it.

welcome to PiP. don't be too honest around
these pages. ha! ahem, inside joke.

-chris.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-02-03 12:02 PM

(smiles) This is a powerfully bittersweet debut, sweet friend, I love it, very sincere outpouring of emotions! welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

seven_conscious
Junior Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 33

3 posted 2003-02-03 12:38 PM

my intent here was to write a poem around a "secret" message. it had to be five lines, the poem itself relevant to the message hidden within. thought i'd bold it just to make it obvious. : )

[This message has been edited by seven_conscious (02-03-2003 01:13 AM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-02-03 01:02 AM

good stuff

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

5 posted 2003-02-03 03:09 AM

Enjoyed...James

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

6 posted 2003-02-03 03:15 AM

i love this...helen

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-02-03 07:42 AM

nice.... hidden messages is quite a victorian way to compose... and one not often enough used I think...

I enjoyed

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

8 posted 2003-02-03 08:32 AM

Welcome to Passions, seven... This title has a particularly personal significance for me, and I was pleased to see your rendering of those two words.

PiP is a wonderful place to share your works and enjoy others' - So settle in and enjoy - Also, check your email for a special greeting...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2003-02-03 08:43 AM

Ah yes, the old Hidden Message trick! Double O 7 would be proud of you! As for us? We're pleased that you've come to Passions to entertain us with your poetry! Welcome!

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...
I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound

kaile

Member Ascendant

since 2000-02-06

Posts 5146
singapore

10 posted 2003-02-03 10:35 AM

Hi there,
welcome to passions! i am intrigued at your username. Inspired by Snow White and the Seven Dwarfs perhaps?

enjoyed your ingenuity as apparent in your hidden message. looking forward to reading more of your work

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2003-02-03 01:11 PM

Enjoyed the message and form. Welcome! I'll be looking for more from you. I'm glad you've decided to join this group.

Charisma

Member Ascendant

since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

12 posted 2003-02-03 02:00 PM

ah this was a nice first post, enjoyed it thoroughly....Welcome to Passions

Charisma

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

13 posted 2003-02-03 03:10 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!
Much enjoyed your first post.
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

14 posted 2003-02-03 03:13 PM

Interesting. . . .

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

15 posted 2003-02-03 03:47 PM

Hello

Welcome To Passions In Poety

It's good to see you here. I hope that you like it.
I enjoyed the way you wrote this, with the hidden message.
I look forward to seeing more of your work.

Ethel.....garysgirl

seven_conscious
Junior Member

since 2003-01-27

Posts 33

16 posted 2003-02-03 10:21 PM

just wanted to say thanks to everyone for such a warm welcome : ) i've been reading here for the better part of a week and am so very impressed with what i've read. i appreciate the opportunity to post : )

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