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0 posted 01-31-2003 08:25 PM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

Once again, my thanks to the greatest collaborator this poet has ever had..
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Rain sounded out staccato beats against the windshield glass
As needle drooped to indicate that I was low on gas.
Six days down Texas highways hauling cargo takes it toll
And I could feel the weariness go right down to my soul.

Through rising fog I saw the glow of diner's neon light
As smile broke out from ear to ear at such a welcome sight.
I eased the rig into the lot and entered through the door.
Outside I heard the rain beat down as winds began to roar.

The diner was a clone like many others of its kind,
A little spot of heaven weary truckers loved to find
Where steaming joe against parched lips made tired faces smile
And helped to ease the loneliness one felt, mile after mile.

I thought I had the whole place to myself, to tell the truth,
Until I looked and saw the lady in the corner booth.
Her face was filled with sadness although it projected grace
And I could see a small bruise on the left side of her face.



Although he hadn't noticed her when he walked through the door,
His entrance made her spill some coffee on the diner floor
She didn't lean to wipe it up, just shrank within her seat,
And tried to calm her pounding heart that almost skipped a beat.

"It's just another trucker." She repeated in her mind,
"I'm miles away from home, too far for anyone to find."
She stole a final glance his way, then turned her head and sighed,
Her face reflecting weariness from all the times she'd cried.

Her thoughts began to wander as she tuned the diner out,
Retracing what had brought her to this place of fear and doubt;
She drifted in her solemn thoughts, a little while, until
Her rain-soaked clothes began to give her skin a sudden chill.



I saw her shiver from the cold as she hunched in the booth.
Her age was hard to tell but she was not too far from youth.
Her hair was matted to her face, her dress was sopping wet,
Her eyes exuded sadness that I never will forget.

I took my jacket to her and I said, "Excuse me, miss.
Not tryin' to poke my nose in but you might be needing this.
You're apt to catch your death of cold the way you're freezing so.
Just slip this on and warm up till it's time for you to go."

I saw her head raise slowly as she looked into my eyes.
Her face conveyed a look of need that took me by surprise.
She tried to smile although it didn't turn out quite that way..
"Do you think I look pretty, mister?" I heard her voice say.



He seemed to hesitate a moment - silence filled the air,
His pause however, seemed to be much more than she could bare;
There used to be a day, she thought, when there was no delay ...
She must be truly hideous, she knew, and turned away.

Her lips began to tremble, and her eyes began to fill,
Beneath this stranger's jacket she could feel a bitter chill;
Her husband must be right, for yesterday, when she had fled,
The last words that he yelled at her had filled her mind with dread.

"What happened to the Beauty Queen who won the County Fair?!?
Just look at what a mess you are!" He spat into the air.
"Go run and hide, that's what you do, you're useless here to me!
I should have married Suzie!" he screamed out defiantly.

Now here she sat ... no beauty queen - a parody instead,
Her beauty must have faded over time, just like he said;
She turned to face the stranger, knowing that he wouldn't care,
But met his thoughtful gaze and saw a kind of softness there.



"Do you think I look pretty, mister?", she said, once again.
"Am I the kind of girl who seems respectable to men?
Do you see any qualities that say that I'm ok
Or am I just a loser like he told me yesterday?"

The sadness in her voice was thicker than the fog outside.
The pain she felt, I knew, was more than her heart could abide.
Abuse and mental anguish drove her to this sad despair
And I felt overwhelming grief for that girl shivering there.

I'd seen it happen many times from over-bearing men
When faced with their own failures, thinking what they might have been
Take out frustrations cruelly on their families or wives
To not accept the fact that they had ruined their own lives.

I took her hands in mine and squeezed them gently with a smile.
I said," The rain is letting up - be sunny in a while.
Yes, you ARE pretty! I'd be proud to have a girl like you."
Her smile was real because she knew the words I said were true.



The stranger turned and walked away, but left his jacket there,
He crossed the diner, waived the waitress over to his chair;
The lady watched him order, from the corner of her booth,
And felt a warmth she hadn't had since she was in her youth.

A little glow of self-respect rose slowly from below,
A part of her she'd lost it seemed, so many years ago;
"I don't deserve his cruel abuse. It's he who changed, not I."
She thought about it long and hard, then gave a little sigh.

She knew just what she had to do ... her sense of pride returned,
She walked up to the counter, paid her bill, and then she turned;
She saw the stranger sipping coffee, finishing his meal,
And moved in his direction, with a lightness she could feel.

She handed him his coat and leaned to softly kiss his cheek,
A move that made him blush so hard he couldn't even speak;
She said no words, just walked away, toward a better end,
Though paused to hear the waitress say, "She paid your tab, my friend."

"She told me as she paid your bill, to let you know this part ...
That jacket may have warmed her skin ... but you have warmed her heart."
The trucker looked and saw the young girl walking out the door.
Somehow the night was not as cold as it had been before.



Another thirty hours it took to reach my home and wife.
The time can pass by slow and lonely in a trucker's life.
I pulled in near to three a.m. and entered through the shed
Then tiptoed in to not disturb my wife asleep in bed.

Undressing quickly I slipped in between the cotton sheets
And kissed her in that special place where neck and shoulder meets.
I whispered softly in her ear,"You're very pretty, hon....."
Then closed my eyes and drifted off to sleep. This trip was done.

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (01-31-2003 09:03 PM).]

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(BIG HUGGGSSSSSSSSS) Oh my gosh, now you have me flooding in tears, you always write such beautiful story-telling poems together that speak of the values in life: love of family, love of life, and now, love of loved ones! (smiles) This is such a gorgeous journey, sweet friend, you two always make my day, God Bless You Both, I'm adding this to my library now, we all love you both so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Kit and Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you both!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (01-31-2003 08:34 PM).]

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2 posted 01-31-2003 08:35 PM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

Kit and Michael---With heart you see and with skill you weave a story that touches me.  So well done and very much enjoyed here.  Thank you both!
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Oh did I enjoy this story!!!!
You're so good, both of you

Titia

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4 posted 01-31-2003 08:51 PM       View Profile for paladin   Email paladin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for paladin

Slice of life poems like this restore my faith in mankind.In a world filled with lurid tales of expliotation a simple tale of unselfish kindness is so very rare.

paladin

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All right you two! Once again you made me and my wife very happy. Collaborations like this should never stop...

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

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6 posted 01-31-2003 08:58 PM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

oh wow,
this is beautiful and amazing.
not sure whether to laugh or cry ..think I'll just smile.
Love it.

Always, Alyssa

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     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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Brava!!!  OH!  You two sure know how to weave a tale!
What a wonderful story..
Well worth the wait for the two of you to duet again.
Amazing...simply amazing!
Hugs and kudos to you both, Nancy.



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  So you won't ever forget me~

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You two, write the most wonderful stories together. I have missed you, both.
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9 posted 02-01-2003 07:11 AM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

Thanks so much for the lovely comments everyone. It is always such a treat for me to write with Michael. Waiting for the next stanza's to come back and see what direction he's taken the story, is a thrill I will always treasure.  

Thank you for the kind responses, and thank you Michael, for making my week.

Much appreciation to all,
/Kit
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Well haven't you both just started out February on the right note!  What can normally be a cold and disenchanting few weeks as we edge our way out of Winter and into the welcome arms of soon to come spring...will now be a wonderful adventure as we keep the thought in our minds of what one kind gesture can do for a stranger...

Hugs to you both!
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11 posted 02-01-2003 11:08 AM       View Profile for Charisma   Email Charisma   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Charisma's Home Page   View IP for Charisma

*wow*........*WOW* you two are an amazing duet.....fabulous from beginning till end, wish I had the right words to say how I enjoyed the write.





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12 posted 02-01-2003 11:41 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Goodness, Michael and Kit....
I guess I haven't been here long enough to see one of the other stories you two wrote together. I have a feeling they must have been just as beautiful as this one. This is amazing, how the two of you just weaved the story together like only one person wrote it. I love it. So it's a

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By the way, which name do I look under in
the archives to find more of these duets by you two???
I love this  
       

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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Kit & Mike,
You weave a story soft and light just filled with pure delight.
I never thought to stop the read it sounded oh so right.
The things you write just rises to the top.
And
My wish for both of you is that you never stop.
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This is so satisfying. Grief, Assurance, Compassion, Empathy, Insight....and a happy ending for all.


It is all there. Amazing to watch two writers meet the challenge of the other so very well. Had we not been told we'd have not known two wrote this. Such talent, what a treat! Enjoyed thoroughly.

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
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Truly makes me wonder what wonders of beauty I have missed in the past.  The collaboration on this piece was touching, realistic, emotional, heartbreaking, serene and many other wonderful things.  A little kindness goes a LONG way, and I think you conveyed that point in this poem superbly.  You two have a most wonderful gift and I am glad I am able to benefit from it, you truly touched my heart!  Wonderful job!!!!

It's not the load that breaks you down, it's the way you carry it. ~ Lena Horne

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Dr. Pepper there are the archives
and all I have to say is that I went "Ahhhhhhhhhhh" and smiled at two friends I just love to read when they write together.

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This flowed beautifully from the first words. A very nicely crafted poem.
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From small seeds to mighty deeds, both of you fit so well together, may you never stop.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown


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We want to thank all of you for taking the time to read, respond and enjoy our efforts together....you are all a pleasure to write for, as Kit is a wonderful lady to write with. Thank you all!

Ethel...here are links to a few of them. There are others...
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum43/HTML/002216.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum47/HTML/003239.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum48/HTML/003155.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum70/HTML/001249.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum70/HTML/002293.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum69/HTML/000745.html

The "Dear Honey" Series...
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum52/HTML/003009.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum52/HTML/003129.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum52/HTML/003163.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum53/HTML/000015.html
http://piptalk.com/pip/Forum53/HTML/000137.html


Hope you enjoy!!!
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A wonderful Collaboration. Well Done both of you.

Maree
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Kit and "Deer" -Wonderful work, you two!

A touching, heart-warming poem!

Cor
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Hey, Michael, thanks for the links, so I wouldn't have to go look them up. I've read the first 4, and I don't want to stop, but I've got to go to bed. I'll read the rest in the morning. Goodnight PIP friends.....





By the way, Kit and Michael, I  LOVE  these. Ya'll are absolutely  amazing.
     

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What a beautiful poem... filled with love...

I enjoyed it so much!!!

Neeraja
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Two of my dearest Passionate friends
This is simply wonderful
... You make an unbeatable poetic team, ya know?...
 
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