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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-01-30 10:35 PM


what would they say?
can they tell?
im just a poor little girl
taken hostage,
on this boat,
to the white bread tuxedo
cigarroom smoking world,
sitting beside a l2 piece set of silverware
on the captains table,
what would they say
will i be branded poor white trash,
forevermore,
if i use the wrong fork
to slice and dice
the romaine?
can they see my roots,
of working class poor
city projects dweller,
child of the 60's,
rockaway girl,
singing sargent peppers songs,
while i swang off
steel grey monkey bars,
rooftop pidgeons,
decending on
colored chalk drawings,
transforming
black asphalt playgrounds
on hot summer nights
into an island paradise,
wine, more wine,
red, or white
drink up,drink up
straight from the bottle
just like  home,
a disposable dixicup drinker,
toast to life,
dont need
a freaking
crystal glass,
get me thruough this dinner,
what would they say,
can they see it in my face,
can they see how kinky i really am,
that as we chitchat about nothing,
i'm enjoying a hot and heavy
2 minute romance of the eyes,
with the maitre 'd
as we dine right now,
what would they say
if they knew,
a 47 year old woman
raised on blissful beachnights
looking thru the view
of the lifeguards world
truly still believes
in wishing on starlight?
what would they say,
if they realized
one of the few things
this once helpflessly insecure girl has learned
as the summers roll on by,
is that times like this are just
all gloss, all filler, all bullshit,
that
things like this don't really matter much at all

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-31-2003 07:00 AM).]

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bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
1 posted 2003-01-31 05:42 AM


Why do we care what strangers think but somehow we do especially when we are on cruises. People who we may never see have influence over us. I can relate to what you say, cause I have been there. Why do your writings stir up memories. Played many a time upon rusting monkey bars. I can still feel the sand between the toes from the moonlight parties on the beach. Where have those days gone? Wish I had 30 years back.
regards2you
Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
2 posted 2003-01-31 07:31 AM



Michele,

Descriptive, right to the "freaking and bullshit" words...these belie an effort of supposing she is anything higher than how taught...

red blood vs. blue blood????

I don't think so....good taste and manners are not subject to wealth of any class or race....

"They" were playing lap games under the table while she was eye dancing with the waiter...no difference here between 'classes' except money....

What would cause 'white trash' to presume the 'upper class' is less immoral....they just have a better box of dress-up clothes, real pearls vs. pop-beads....if one can get jealousy and envy to take a back seat one can undress everybody...no difference at all....really! Time will catch up with every soul and all I can do is be sure this rock sparkles.. when I stop playing God I let Him be God and justice will prevail...only He can judge, as only He knows the density of any one soul...they are not the same...as one face is different from another...

This poem certainly provoked me Michele. Poor people who have their act together can waltz in any group of people and be comfortable...likewise, so can the wealthy, be just as comfortable rubbing elbows with street people....has to do with inner love not inner city.....


Thank you for this is helps me clarify much in my own life of poverty.....
choices I make on a daily basis...

You wrote this very well. I do like the depiction of inner city living.

Hugs, Pat


  

  

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
3 posted 2003-01-31 07:42 AM


thank you pat,
it just was written as i spoke online to an old rockaway beach,queens, new  york, friend,
actually growing up working class, we were all in the same boat and we didnt realize we were not "upscale" or anything remotely like that, until little by little our parents wanted to "move it on up" to suburbia; then we realized that the mercedes was power, not the chevy biscayne. therefore, the sting of not being "comfortable" or "well to to" setting in in those teen years, well something like this,
dysfunction lived in the "father knows best" worlds back then, too, just didnt realize it, took me a while to become comfortable with who i was, and who i am and that there is beauty everywhere if you have the heart to find it, but i still find people do put on airs many times and it makes me kind of feeling like diving down into my mermaids rock on the blessed rockaway shore again

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

4 posted 2003-01-31 08:44 AM


M? Your reply is poetry as well.

I so enjoyed this--and would also love to see you continue...so much to be said here. (and oh-I-would-love to talk with you about just such experiences--chuckle--seems I "clean up nicely" m'self! )

Loved this.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2003-01-31 08:56 AM


inkedgoddess
You state the question and the answer, the write is a delight.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio
6 posted 2003-01-31 10:56 AM


thanks, kids,
serene one,  anytime, hope youre doing okay,
love and peace to u
\

bklynboy
Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
7 posted 2003-01-31 08:48 PM


i remember growing up not knowing any better. We were all in the same boat or inner tube. We were just kids and we had fun. Too bad those kids had to grow up but who said they grew up, they just got older.
Aenimal
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350
the ass-end of space
8 posted 2003-02-01 05:23 PM


I'd say you're a gem, a one of a kind beautiful soul
ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
9 posted 2003-02-01 05:32 PM


Ya know...
I like your style. Straight up, strong and earthy. Good job. ThisDiamond

Kethry
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
10 posted 2003-02-01 05:35 PM


inkgoddess, you scrub up ok.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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