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majnu
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0 posted 2003-01-30 09:58 PM


Sunset


Sweet sunset so often described,
Poet’s pallet empty and canvas covered
Yet majesty daily reigns down.

Sand in toes escaping cool water’s kiss,
Face the west, eyes towards flames quest,
SEE the sun, attention to one.

Sun spot flare, focus narrow there,
Stationary sentinel set, Voila, la lumiére arrêtte!
Laissez faire la terre tourné.

Heavenly traveler sweeps you away from the
Sun. Rush of blood acceleration back,
The sun does not set, the earth turns away…

Like the Poet from his eternal Flame.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

© Copyright 2003 Zaheer Abbas Ali - All Rights Reserved
Earth Angel
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1 posted 2003-01-30 10:13 PM


You are a poet who faces the sun and his eternal flame--for your words light up the page!

Warm hugs,
Linda

Brad Majors
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2 posted 2003-01-31 02:38 PM


Its hard to understand why this has got lost in the shuffle when it rings out so beautifully!
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3 posted 2003-02-01 11:12 AM


Beautiful!!

Charisma

majnu
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4 posted 2003-02-01 12:15 PM


thanks to you all for the compliments.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

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5 posted 2003-02-02 03:51 PM


A unique and thoroughly enjoyable sunset POV.
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6 posted 2003-02-02 04:49 PM


Beautiful imagery... sweet and beautiful.  Thank you for this delicate dance of the soul.

Thank you...

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7 posted 2003-02-02 05:06 PM


This is very beautiful. I enjoyed reading it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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8 posted 2003-02-03 01:43 AM


wow! I enjoyed this greatly!
inkedgoddess
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9 posted 2003-02-03 06:55 AM


no comprendo el frances, pero me gusto mucho
su poema
just love watching the sun go down, makes the day come together for me

Nan
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10 posted 2003-02-03 09:37 PM


Looks like a success, eh?...
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11 posted 2003-02-03 10:36 PM




(smiles) Oh Majnu, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, this is a beautiful sunglare of magic from your pen that lighted my heart reading! (sigh) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Majnu, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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12 posted 2003-02-03 11:03 PM


I can feel that your poem was full of rushing thoughts. Perhaps you could not turn away from the gaze you laid upon the sun. I think that you knew that it would burn you, but you told the tale like a lover ripped from their soul...

Quite nice.

XOXO,
Purple_Muse

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