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GG
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since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

0 posted 2003-01-30 12:16 PM

Silent stars gaze over
And a reflection
Of us
Glimmers
Upon moon hued
Shore.

Refresh me once again
With the thoughts
In your eyes.

Take me to that dream
Of smiles,
Past reality.

Beyond the deepest truths,
Yet more than real.

For I exist not alone,
With you, beside me;
We now one.

Let starlight glimmer
And please,
Whispering
Silently
Caress my hands
In yours,
Tenderly, tell,
You love me.

(a friend asked me to write a love poem. I'm write based on what I'm feeling though, so I know its not really good. I need the inspiration and feeling.)

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

1 posted 2003-01-30 12:22 PM

Simply exquisite. A lovely read.

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-01-30 12:37 PM

Alyssa,

Not really good? Are you kidding me?
This is excellent....cannot imagine then when you do fall in love how your poetry might read.

I honesty enjoy this...several lines and ideas I liked a lot....

ummmmm...."the moon hued shore????"
I think...was how you wrote it....

really good....Hugs and love, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

dhicks03
Member

since 2002-12-26

Posts 267
Missouri,USA

3 posted 2003-01-30 12:58 PM

Wow....simply breathtaking!!
Yes Yes Yes!!
Dennis

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2003-01-30 02:08 AM

I think it's great!

GG
Member Elite

since 2002-12-03

Posts 3532
Lost in thought

5 posted 2003-01-30 08:38 AM

WhiteRose,
I'm glad you liked it

thank you for reading and replying.

Pat,
yea I'm still not satisfied with it. But I suppose it won't get better. Thank you much! I'm glad you viewed it as good. And yea, I think I cam't wait to se what I write when I'm in love, also

Hugs

dennis,
thank you! hope it didn't take too much breath though, breathing is healthy y'know!

Dixie,
Glad you do!

thansk for reading and replying.

God bless
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
(blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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