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regards2you
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Escape!

     Race bare,
    from warm lair,
         fluffed furry,
   can't protect

from

lashing, stinging tongue.


   Feeling filleted,
     as if skinned alive,

stripped!

   Wetted welts,
I run.

     Hot printed traces,
   in muddy melt,
      wounded pulsates

tell,

    of living,
or,
    of dying.


Hop! Hop! Hop!

    To musical notes
        of your luscious lips,
   singing,

     ~your kill.~


I huddle hide,
    in life's lean-to,
concealed,
  healing heat
  from inside, out.

In your satiated slumber,
     I shall catch you,
surprised.

Though yet bared to soul,
       I will return to lair,
  I am warm throughout.

   Now, ~cured.~

For,
your tongue lashing produced

       ~rawhide,~

I, tougher than ever before.

Next time,
  your flailing fury
  will snap backwards,

choking you
     on the truth
          you would not see.

.

Your
words
cannot
kill
me.

.
.
.
.
    

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

© Copyright 2003 Patricia L.Thompson - All Rights Reserved
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regards2you
A hard palette of paint, interesting.
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2 posted 01-29-2003 10:37 AM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

Pat, even though abusive words can't actually kill, they certainly can hurt. They do make us tougher, in a way, but they still make scars that are very hard to heal....
.
.
.
.

This was very interesting, and I like the way you wrote it, too.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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3 posted 01-29-2003 10:57 AM       View Profile for GG   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for GG

Enjoyed this peice alot Pat,
All too true it displays the strength we gain by the pain we're faced with.
I love your style
Love and hugs to you,
Always, Alyssa

- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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4 posted 01-29-2003 10:59 AM       View Profile for Cpat Hair   Email Cpat Hair   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cpat Hair

innocence to hidden caution..we learn on times say so...how abrasive to the tender other words can be...

Enjoyed... strongly written.
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Sy,

Thanks for reading and replying.
smiling here...my soft brushes need a good cleaning, first....loaded with stardust...from last write.


Ethel,

Words can kill, depending on the age of the little spiritual bunny....given enough time however, God can heal those wounds creating a flawless, priceless pelt...to warm Himself...

Hugs, and thanks for replying. Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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Alyssa,

You are right, yes, we gain strength..
Thanks for reading/replying. Hugs and love to you..

Ron,

So true. ~Abusive~ to the tender, others words can be...sometimes, even tender quiet words can rip a soul...guess it depends on what was said.....

thanks for reading/replying  Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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"choking you
     on the truth
          you would not see."
Loved those lines, isn't that the way it is though?
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Words can kill self-esteem, it happens all the time.  Enjoyed much, Pat, nice work!

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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strong words , coming across loud and clear, not pulling any punches, in this one.
really good , hits in the face,
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geezzzz...I read that aloud and  it got stronger and stronger...'til the end.

A tongue lashing almost hurts worse than a bruise...a bruise can heal but words are ingrained forever in the mind.

hugss
M
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regards2you - whew, don't know what to say, except you sure told it here...

BC
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You definitely worked the metaphor for all it was worth, and your title just about says it all.

Enjoyed the tough texture of your words
and the strength that stands behind them.


*Bravo* Pat~  
Makes me want to stand up and cheer!!!

(here, here)
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Indeed - Words may sting.. even hurt badly.. but they shan't kill you - and you can surely overcome the harm they inflict...
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Amazing write Pat...Much appreciated the thoughts here.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

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what can I say?
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BRAVO!!! Oh Patricia, this is lovely, sweet friend, this made me smile to see your Xena: Warrior Princess strength shining on here, as you are the true winner! (big hugggsssss) You go girl, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Powerful, well done--enjoyed!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

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- And so it was that time stood still -
     (blink, breathe, stand, fight)

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