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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Escape! Race bare, from warm lair, fluffed furry, can't protect from lashing, stinging tongue. Feeling filleted, as if skinned alive, stripped! Wetted welts, I run. Hot printed traces, in muddy melt, wounded pulsates tell, of living, or, of dying. Hop! Hop! Hop! To musical notes of your luscious lips, singing, ~your kill.~ I huddle hide, in life's lean-to, concealed, healing heat from inside, out. In your satiated slumber, I shall catch you, surprised. Though yet bared to soul, I will return to lair, I am warm throughout. Now, ~cured.~ For, your tongue lashing produced ~rawhide,~ I, tougher than ever before. Next time, your flailing fury will snap backwards, choking you on the truth you would not see. . Your words cannot kill me. . . . . ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
regards2you A hard palette of paint, interesting. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Pat, even though abusive words can't actually kill, they certainly can hurt. They do make us tougher, in a way, but they still make scars that are very hard to heal.... . . . . This was very interesting, and I like the way you wrote it, too.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Enjoyed this peice alot Pat, All too true it displays the strength we gain by the pain we're faced with. I love your style  Love and hugs to you, Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
innocence to hidden caution..we learn on times say so...how abrasive to the tender other words can be... Enjoyed... strongly written. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, Thanks for reading and replying. smiling here...my soft brushes need a good cleaning, first....loaded with stardust...from last write. Ethel, Words can kill, depending on the age of the little spiritual bunny....given enough time however, God can heal those wounds creating a flawless, priceless pelt...to warm Himself... Hugs, and thanks for replying. Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Alyssa, You are right, yes, we gain strength.. Thanks for reading/replying. Hugs and love to you.. Ron, So true. ~Abusive~ to the tender, others words can be...sometimes, even tender quiet words can rip a soul...guess it depends on what was said..... thanks for reading/replying Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"choking you on the truth you would not see." Loved those lines, isn't that the way it is though? |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Words can kill self-esteem, it happens all the time. Enjoyed much, Pat, nice work! The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
strong words , coming across loud and clear, not pulling any punches, in this one. really good , hits in the face, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
geezzzz...I read that aloud and it got stronger and stronger...'til the end. A tongue lashing almost hurts worse than a bruise...a bruise can heal but words are ingrained forever in the mind. hugss M |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
regards2you - whew, don't know what to say, except you sure told it here... BC |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
You definitely worked the metaphor for all it was worth, and your title just about says it all. Enjoyed the tough texture of your words and the strength that stands behind them. *Bravo* Pat~ Makes me want to stand up and cheer!!! (here, here) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Indeed - Words may sting.. even hurt badly.. but they shan't kill you - and you can surely overcome the harm they inflict... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing write Pat...Much appreciated the thoughts here. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what can I say? |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! Oh Patricia, this is lovely, sweet friend, this made me smile to see your Xena: Warrior Princess strength shining on here, as you are the true winner! (big hugggsssss) You go girl, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Patricia, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Powerful, well done--enjoyed!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
 - And so it was that time stood still - |
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