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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2003-01-28 06:57 PM




the night's blazing sunset
vanishes into the past,
breathing its fire this morning
igniting the calm of the sky,

november's withered leaves
buried beneath winter's hold,
create colorful landscapes,
bouquets for springtime brides,

lines of revolving clouds
escape, trackless to your eyes,
already reliving their journey,
before your wandering mind,

the strenght of the mighty ocean
dissolves suddenly into mere foam,
soon swept away in the undertow,
raging again beneath the moonlight,

and for you,my friend
stuck in despair,
remember
you too
are moving,
and becoming,
while you appear
to be
standing still


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the_loner_23
Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479
Jacksonville, Florida, USA
1 posted 2003-01-28 07:00 PM


This is a beautiful piece of work

Cold hands means a warm heart

bklynboy
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since 2002-12-15
Posts 660
florida
2 posted 2003-01-28 07:30 PM


michele...you know how to paint pictures with words....I like that....you keep challenging my mind. Thanks!
Tari Miriel
Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 69
The state of mind
3 posted 2003-01-28 08:28 PM


I'm loving the momentum~
garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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4 posted 2003-01-28 08:30 PM


Michele, this is beautiful. I like it.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

SmartChick
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081
On A Journey To The Unknown
5 posted 2003-01-28 08:51 PM


This is so beautiful!
BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
6 posted 2003-01-28 11:46 PM


lines of revolving clouds
escape, trackless to your eyes,
already reliving their journey,
before your wandering mind,

Love the perpetual motion in this,
and the way you make your words fly~

So good Michele~


passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
7 posted 2003-01-29 02:54 AM


I felt like this was for me!
regards2you
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since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940
California
8 posted 2003-01-29 09:37 AM




Michele,

Many pretty lines in this...it does move..with a sense of hope for the hopeless....almost a "this too shall pass"...

Enjoyed, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
9 posted 2003-01-29 11:43 AM


love your ending and the positive mood...
*s
M

Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
10 posted 2003-01-29 02:28 PM


Even standing still.. we must move on... Well said, ig...
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