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Ada'doLisdo'ti
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0 posted 2003-01-28 12:29 PM


I was standing on solid ground.
The one in my arms let me down.
I miss the cloud I was on then.
But this is a new place to begin.

I've started over, I didn't want to.
Now here you are saying you'll be true.
I had a life I liked very much.
Its gone, no longer crave the touch.

Now that I'm back on solid ground.
You decide to come back around.
Every instict tells me stay.
But I can't do it I've gotta walk away.

I was standing on solid ground.
It hurt me so much when you let me down.

Of all I've lost; I miss my innocence  the most.

© Copyright 2003 Albert D Lopez - All Rights Reserved
Professor Gloom
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1 posted 2003-01-28 12:43 PM


very nice little sonnet
Enjoyed

Gloom


Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2003-01-28 12:45 PM


Ada'doLisdo'ti
Enjoyed the read.

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-01-28 12:58 PM


Albert, I really enjoyed reading this. It's really pretty....
passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-28 01:08 PM


Albert, kind of like a song!
Nan
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5 posted 2003-01-28 01:28 PM


Ah - A bittersweet place to be... Nicely penned...
Ada'doLisdo'ti
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6 posted 2003-01-28 02:48 PM


Thanks
Kethry
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7 posted 2003-01-28 03:47 PM


Nicely done. Don't you hate it when the ground shifts like that.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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