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Katy 2
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
She sat on the bed and listened Knowing most of the story. Her toes separated by cotton balls She took one last stroke of crimson To the end of her large left toe And looked up. He had finished. Sitting there in the chair A glass of whiskey in hand With eyes that seemed To be watching someone speak. “Yes, I still have the .45” she answered him after a pause. He twisted a bit in his chair And propped his legs on the edge of the bed Letting his head fall back With unfocused eyes. “Why don’t you come to bed?” she asked. “Your toes dry enough I won’t mess them up?” he replied with a grin. “No” was her whisper “but, they can be redone.” She pulled the cotton from between her toes And rose to face him. Off Ivory buttons slipped through holes Then buckles rattled in release She kissed him and watched his eyes Change from dark brown to hazel As the sun caught them Shameless |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
very well done capt. enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh good gosh... look at the imagery tumbling.... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Great scene! Enjoyed. I like these lines which ~almost~ could be a poem in themselves... "Off ivory buttons slipped through holes Then buckles rattled in release." Enjoying your writing. Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh Gee!!! Here we go again! Yippee! YES! Somehow I knew she had red polish on her toes!!  ~Big hugs for this one...more please?~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
“No” was her whisper “but, they can be redone.” Ah..the return of the red head..with her toes painted red...yes they can be redone...again...great write, Ron.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Vivid! Captivating! A .45"? Is he sure he wants to do this? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Well steam me screen why dont ya Woo hoo...katy heats up ... lets see what else she inspires in you. Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky. |
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Eromyna Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 306Pheonix, AZ, USA |
I love the lines about the eyes, those last three. Really intriguing. "I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation." |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, Now, Capt. Ron...just which forum is this going to continue in?????  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair Great sense of humor, enjoyed. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Ron, I just love this, sweet friend, this is a new passionate introduction to the next installation of this series, yay, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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