A Little Tweaking... - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Tim
Senior Member

since 1999-06-08

Posts 1794

0 posted 2003-01-28 12:11 PM

As evening paints a sunset, across sky's western face,
I soar above on winds of time, on wings of feathered grace,
In the distance, mountains high, in regal majesty,
Stand watch over plains that stretch below, as far as eyes can see.

Sentinels, stone granite peaks, capped in virgin snow,
From their bosoms to the plains, the snow as rivers flow,
Between the peaks and verdant plains, lay the mountain's valley,
Conduit for the alpine streams, from forth the torrents sally.

In headlong fall down mountain’s side, flows racing mountain brook,
To the valley floor below, from high in heaven’s nook,
Through the foothills to the prairies, does the water flow,
Transforming from a mountain brook, to stream with currents slow.

Beside the gentle flowing stream, a owl to darkness calls,
As moonlight filters through the leaves, and calm of evening falls.
Above the stars of welkin's light, shine in majesty,
Upon the splendor of the plains, beneath night’s canopy.

As hush of evening spreads its dark, the sky erupts ablaze,
A million twinkling stars above, hearken heaven's praise,
Reflected on the plains below, the twinkling of star's lights,
Unfettered wings of angel's grace, I soar into the night.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

1 posted 2003-01-28 12:30 PM

Tim, this is absolutely beautiful. Thank you for sharing it with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Muys
Member

since 2002-04-06

Posts 389
The Netherlands

2 posted 2003-01-28 06:24 AM

Hello Tim
It must be beautiful,snow on the mountains.
In Holland we have snow to morrow, I hear it on the Radio. we haven't mountains.
Thank you Tim a nice poem.
Muys

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-01-28 06:26 AM

In headlong fall down mountain’s side,

~*~

This line alone
takes one into the rapids...

beautiful!

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

4 posted 2003-01-28 08:30 AM

This is just so ~complete~ and leaves me with a good feeling. It is especially well written and I think it magnificent. Enjoy all your writing.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2003-01-28 08:34 AM

You do soar indeed - This does create a wonderful visage... The glory of a sunset acquiescing to the heark of twinkling stars... I'm loving it...

paladin

Senior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 930
Pensacola,Fl.

6 posted 2003-01-28 09:50 AM

I have become the eagle.My mighty wings ride the mountain wind.Your words take me there.

paladin

....a knight without armor

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.