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To A Daughter

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Thisman
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0 posted 01-27-2003 10:49 PM       View Profile for Thisman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Thisman


pay attention
this is the path
on each side is danger
follow carefully

you might notice the smell of cinnamon
and excrement
at times it will be hard to tell which is which
don't let such things distract you

try this on
it's a coping device
it will allow you to get past obstacles
such as loneliness and frustration

my parents gave it to me
I have tried to improve upon it somewhat

at first, you will notice that I become continually larger
filling up a substantial portion of your view

after a few years, I will grow so small as to be insignificant

then, perhaps after I am no longer with you
I will become large again

don't let this trouble you at this point
it is simply a paradox of this place

for now I will guide both of us
later, I will fall back and you will
move on alone

you might notice, far up ahead
on the mountain
is a single silver light

no matter what happens
keep moving toward it

any questions?
good; take my hand
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Temptress
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1 posted 01-27-2003 11:45 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

I've read this three times, and just don't know the correct way to reply to it. I love it. Thats all I can really say. A very interesting take on a father's veiw and guidance.

Jenn

Did I say welcome yet?

~~I Love You~~

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2 posted 01-27-2003 11:52 PM       View Profile for garysgirl   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit garysgirl's Home Page   View IP for garysgirl

I love this, too, and I fully understand this. It's really beautiful, the way you put it into words....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Tari Miriel
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3 posted 01-28-2003 08:19 AM       View Profile for Tari Miriel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Tari Miriel

Your daughter has many riches,
her father's wisdom the most invaluable~
regards2you
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4 posted 01-28-2003 08:25 AM       View Profile for regards2you   Email regards2you   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for regards2you



Though probably not intended this makes me grin......perhaps, in the reality of it....the sureness...

I like it a great deal.

Reminds me of someone I know.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Sandpiper
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5 posted 01-29-2003 05:30 AM       View Profile for Sandpiper   Email Sandpiper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sandpiper

Love the way you did this, quite creative...makes one think!!!  Welcome!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

carol
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6 posted 02-03-2003 11:41 PM       View Profile for carol   Email carol   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit carol's Home Page   View IP for carol

I love this i have one written to my daughter also i havent posted it yet
passing shadows
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7 posted 02-04-2003 03:21 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

OH YES! what a brilliant piece!
Marge Tindal
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8 posted 10-25-2003 09:48 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

ThisMan~
Oh, the tender of it all~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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