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Poetic Bard
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0 posted 2003-01-27 04:07 PM


Anyway, its a different approach at poetry for me, tell me what you anustly think.

~Slow Motion, See me let go~
Slow motion,
See me let go,
To pretend we all die young,
Slow motion,
See me let go,
I remember those days,
Slow motion,
See me let go,
As our dreams fly away,
Slow motion,
See me let go,
Falling down from all the stars,
Slow motion,
See me let go,
To try and recall all those days,
Slow motion,
See me let go,
To pretend that I'll die young,
I remember all those days,
When our dreams would fly away,
Leaving behind the stars,
Slow motion,
Always seeming to let me go.

               Anyway, hope everyone who read it enjoyed it, again, tell me what you all think.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

© Copyright 2003 Joel J. Harrington - All Rights Reserved
regards2you
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1 posted 2003-01-27 05:54 PM



Well, here goes. I have a major headache right now, so don't know how that effects my reply.

This somehow reminds of how when I was a little girl I'd get into a swing and twirl up as tightly as possible. lift my feet  and let go.....were there thoughts of dying young??? no thoughts, just being free,whirling....

interesting and I'll get back to read it without the pain in my head...

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

regards2you
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2 posted 2003-01-27 05:57 PM


....other reply not up yet for editing purposes, even though title says slow motion....it still reminds me of spinning..... Pat
  

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Poetic Bard
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3 posted 2003-01-27 06:13 PM


Spinning eh?  Interesting, I'll have to try and see how it goes with that idea.  Hmm...
Spinning....

And I hope the memories it brought up aren't too sad.

I bleed, you all read, and may the blood never stop spilling for loss of emotion would be all too damning.
~Joel

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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4 posted 2003-01-27 06:28 PM


Greetings!
Received the feeling of casting dust away from the hand to the earth...as if suspended in a dream world.
Interesting approach.
The tantra added to that feeling of falling.
ThisDiamond

Bill Charles
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5 posted 2003-01-27 07:49 PM


Poetic Bard - to see all in slow motion, wouldn't that be something to do...

BC

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