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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2003-01-26 12:58 PM



Why pluck the fruit for chance of sacred sac
If bone and mortar more than stay the hook
The muse has whisked the mortal from attack
From face that froze the blood without a look
That time began before the tree had rot
And time shall end with every tree ablaze
Why to the course of cutting kindling caught
My muse stands strong upon my sinful days
Though armies draft my veins to course for them
As I the one who holds the trigger tense
Once kissed of bullet saved by muses whim
He does not shift for lack of recompense
If shields shall stay the serpents severed wrath
It’s Faith who cups the fruit to make the path

© Copyright 2003 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2003-01-26 01:03 PM


nice message walt!
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2 posted 2003-01-26 01:07 PM



Heeeee'ssss Baaaaccccckkkkk!

garysgirl
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3 posted 2003-01-26 04:14 PM


Walt, I love the way you write. I wish you would come around more often and let us see your poetry.......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

paladin
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4 posted 2003-01-26 07:23 PM


The meter of this poem is classic.I think my brother MoonShadow would like it.

paladin

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Poet deVine
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5 posted 2003-01-26 09:14 PM


Wonderful!!! It's nice to read you here Walt!!
Eromyna
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6 posted 2003-01-26 09:19 PM


I'm not sure I got all that. It's probably something I have to read again later, and try to comprehend. But the portions that made sense were really stirring.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

Nan
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7 posted 2003-01-27 09:32 AM


"It’s Faith who cups the fruit to make the path"

...Pretty wayout wise words walty...


Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2003-01-27 09:35 AM


wayoutwalt
Loved the play of symbols, enjoyed.

elisaseyes
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9 posted 2003-01-28 05:23 PM


Your muse works well Walt
Dr.Moose1
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10 posted 2003-01-28 07:02 PM


Wayout,
In a very simplistic Freudian overview,I'd have to say the author almost had his "fruit"
shot off! If that's the case, (which I sincerely doubt) that's one big loss for the Vienna Boys' Choir, but hey, he can still sing bass. Thoroughly enjoyed.
Doc

Tari Miriel
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11 posted 2003-01-28 07:50 PM


The real question is
why NOT pluck the fruit
when it matures into
an awesome delicacy such
as this?

I likes...I likes...!

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