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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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I... feel the outline of you, traced with eyes wanting to believe you are there but only empty reflections, a faceless you to bring me a message of aloneness took a journey down a road of dreams trying to remember what it felt like to be loved deceived myself and couldn't settle for less will live for the moment, tucking away the future but will always have the words in their place next to my pillow to be touched by hands that touched yours having made those dreams come true if only then... M "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Bittersweet memories indeed - Very nicely penned, M...  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, A lovely write and a beautiful read. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Very touching. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
but will always have the words in their place next to my pillow to be touched by hands that touched yours having made those dreams come true if only then... Damn, I like that. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you Nan and Sy...memories are always there to warm... Thank you Pat...I am working off of an old tired computer (I made the mistake the other day of telling a friend on here that I have never had my computers crash...and darned if it didn't the other night) So my words were all I could feel this morning since I seem to have come down with some "bug" besides the one my good computer has  Duncan, thank you..that's my favorite part too...because it is the truth M ** I am spending the morning updating this computer while my other is at the "Doctors" for a diagnosis so if I am not responding to poems much today it is because I am on s l o w s p e e d...and downloading the programs I need to be on line. [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (01-26-2003 01:07 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
oh, the longing was so very clearly woven in this piece. I always enjoy the talent of your poetry... Smiles from ThisDiamond |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, and I am glad that you let us see your memories...written so well in your poetry...  Sorry about your computer. I know how computer trouble is. And, I will be missing your replies, but understand completely.  "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (01-26-2003 01:27 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't think that I've ever NOT been able to relate to what you write...and feel it in my heart. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
simply beautiful & touching. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
nakedthoughts is right -- you lay them bare and help us feel every sensation as we live it through your words. A sweet and masterful piece of writing, that will haunt me for a while. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Our dreams never seem to last long enough... it's as though they rest on the cutting edge of reality and never truly fall away. Love your writing Maureen~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you TD, Vandana I am pleased that you enjoy my words Ethel, I am full of memories when you get to be my age between my hands freezing at the key board and a slower computer and mouse, I will try to read at least. hugs M Dixie, your responses are so appreciated. Thank you, M Thank you Chris for your kind words. Ratleader, I enjoyed your response to me, you make me smile. ( besides you understand my name) Thank you hugs M Lori, you know what..that's how I feel...on the cutting edge of reality...stuckkkkk!!!! Love You, Lor M |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I could feel your words. And when that happens, those words have to be good. Enjoyed. |
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Tari Miriel Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 69The state of mind |
A fleeting permanence, unfortunate yet resolving~ |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I don't think I could respond more succinctly than Nan, her words are right on about your words! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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