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Hollow Ecstasy
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Hollow Ecstasy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Hollow Ecstasy She sets upon a pedicel. A let of mind, a codicil An urn filled up with vintage dust Of vacillations of my lust Yet there she stay in glories lie Within my lay of mind and sigh A play within a wastelands beach Forever short and out of reach. A figment of a wishing ID A pageant and forever hid. But ever mixing in my life With haunting play upon her fife It is a part of my entire A living flaming parts desire A part that forms an awesome cold Yet warms my heart that’s growing old It is my wonderment of now. And some would say my holy cow. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You caught me with your couplet... for I heard Pan begin to play though it's winter, trees would sway and leaves would brush me green again for I thought Pan began to play... he took me to land's end delights and bid me g'day then brought me night, then paths bid me my own way wend, for he took me to my end delights... but lo, I woke, there was no flute, and deep the empty pain, acute, now I shall have my soul to mend, for lo, no Pan, and lo, no flute... |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Holy Cow, Sy... You start my morning write...  [This message has been edited by Nan (01-26-2003 08:25 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, "but lo, I woke, there was no flute, and deep the empty pain, acute, now I shall have my soul to mend, for lo, no Pan, and lo, no flute..." This write is a delight.  Nan, Good morning love. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She sets upon a pedicel. A let of mind, a codicil An urn filled up with vintage dust Of vacillations of my lust Yet there she stay in glories lie Within my lay of mind and sigh ================================== It is a part of my entire A living flaming parts desire A part that forms an awesome cold Yet warms my heart that's growing old It is my wonderment of now. And some would say my holy cow. ================================== When I read your too cool closing couplet ... I couldnt help but giggle at your "holy cow" Randy, (who was chasing me kittens) ... ran over here and said ... "what did he do now?" When he read your rhymes that made me smile and sigh ... He gave me a high five and said "thats my groovy Sy-guy".  *ww*  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour - wonderful morning read. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, I liked the last four-line stanza and the ending couplet.... anything that warms your heart, warms ours....Enjoyed this greatly. Thanking you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You have a knack of pulling parts That lay so close to my heart That twists me in a distant spell And makes me wish a wishing well. Thank you sugar candy sweet and Did I mention you are a treat? WWRS Chris, Thank you for the wonderful. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you Pat, you got in while I was answering, |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'A figment of a wishing ID A pageant and forever hid. But ever mixing in my life With haunting play upon her fife' I'm sure I'm not the first to mention how amazing it is that you are able to write this consistently well, on a daily basis, Sy. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Duncan Since I'm retired what else do I have but to dream and write. LOL Thank you for the read. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Mr. Sy, I sure am glad that you're retired so that you can delight us with the daily treat of your poetry. And I love the "holy Cow", too. We surprise even ourselves at times, don't we??? ~Ethel~  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
garysgirl Yes we do, thank you dear. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
had to giggle at the end there good stuff today Seymour. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
'Tis a pleasure to read your rhymes. And like your rhythm at these times. They resonate like valued chimes; Their worth is so much....more than dimes.*S* Thanks for your writing, it pleasures many. KJ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
it must be nice to have the time to really give so much of yourself poetically, and it always does shine through your words, many times i feel rushed and thoughts seem scattered, but i just want to release their hold on me at the time, so i go for it, maybe prematurely. your work always does seem polished and finished |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I'm late...I'm late I know Sy! But...I still came and read and shook my head.. in wonder...of how you do this! Afternoon tea? ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing shadows A giggle is worth its weight in gold. kayjay And your comments pleasures me. inkedgoddess Always go for it, you can always go back and polish it. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
 Trees are poems that the earth writes upon the sky. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nancy, Thanks for the stop by, afternnon tea would be fine. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Golly Gee sugar candy sweet. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Randy left this morn ... hes on his way back home, said he'll make it for the big game, have no fear ... Said men and dragons love this day ... said to tell you get out the chips and beer |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, You mean Freddy the free loader is on his way? He better show up with his hands full of munchies, drinkies and crunchies. A for sending him. |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Enjoyed alot. You are a delight. SG |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
SimplyGold Thank you so much. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(sigh) Oh Seymour, this is lovely, sweet friend, I think we all need to live through the eerie moments to find strength and then the peppermint will taste fresher than ever and the honey more like maple! (big hugggsssssss) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, thank you for the kind reply. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Love the way you turn words around and stand them on their heads in this one. You made the reading itself as much a pleasure as the sense of the poem. Good work! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ratleader Thank you for the wonderful reply. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
This is a lovely poem, thanks for putting where others can enjoy your work |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
carol Thank you for the read and reply. |
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