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Kellie_Cantrell
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0 posted 2003-01-26 01:33 AM


I knocked on your door,
you left me there
on the porch in the cold
let me stand in the rain
getting soaked in my blood
as tears streamed down my face.
You left me there in the cold
when i needed you the most,
you said i was a fool,
that i was a crazy tool
That I could never amount to who, I am
I am jsut running wild,
I knocked on your door,
got left in the cold,
you let me soak in the rain, in my blood.
Didn't offer your help, didn't comfort at all.
and I am singing my song,
that I am alive and well,
depressed and cold,
but I knocked on your door, God

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

[This message has been edited by Kellie_Cantrell (01-26-2003 01:45 AM).]

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Kellie_Cantrell
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Posts 1667
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1 posted 2003-01-26 01:37 AM


DISCLAIMER: I am not suicidal. I wrote this poem for a suicide prevention program at school. This is not how I feel.

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

garysgirl
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2 posted 2003-01-26 01:42 AM


Kellie, you wrote this so well that I thought you
really felt this way. I glad that you wrote the disclaimer.
But, that shows that you're a good writer...when you make it believable.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

Kellie_Cantrell
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3 posted 2003-01-26 01:46 AM


Thank You Garysgirl. I wrote the disclaimer after the fact because once i posted I reread the message and thought that this my start up some uneccesary trouble/ concern. Thanks for the nice comments.

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
4 posted 2003-01-26 03:15 AM


Kellie, I have felt this way so many times, but there's a reason for everything...good expressive write
ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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Michigan, USA
5 posted 2003-01-26 11:11 AM


Very much in the moment of the tormented...You write very well Kellie.
ThisDiamond

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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New York
6 posted 2003-01-26 02:25 PM


Passing, Thanks, everything is well.

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York
7 posted 2003-01-26 02:26 PM


thisdiamond- thank you for the compliment

(¨`·.·´¨) (¨`·.·´¨)
  ·.¸(¨`·.·´¨)¸.·´
     *`·.¸.·´*
    Love Always
       Kellie

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