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Pacified Hope
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Pacified Hope |
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rm711 Member
since 2002-11-30
Posts 131Wiltshire, England 
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When the smile goes away All this comes back And when I’m happy It’s all right But when I’m low That’s just the way It goes Everything seems pointless Nothing is right I lose the point of reason And it’s so hard to get back This is me fallen Too weak to go on My words rely on my breathing My breathing relies on my heart My heart is broken So it all falls apart Suffocating without grounds All it takes Is a word from you And I find myself down here I cascade to a place beyond hate Further down than the ground Pressure overloaded Smiles sedate Deterioration of happiness Pacified hope That tomorrow Brings So many better things Screaming Crying Dying My words rely on my breathing My breathing relies on my heart My heart is broken So it all falls apart. small insignificant useless me |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
This is a heart breaking poem that you have written very well. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Man, that is like the most unbelievably sweet poem I've ever read ... I loved it, especially the main catch quote with the whole breathing heart thing - That ruled  .Thanks . L.of.L. Tom . XXX 'There is only a very thin line between genius and insanity, this is measured only on sucess; I am proud to be considered an under-achieving genius'. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
just keep breathing, and keep hope. I loved this poem... Always, Alyssa - And so it was that time stood still - |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This poem really touched me. I liked it a lot, though it was sad to me.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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