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Open Poetry #24

morning chill

abbe
Member

since 2003-01-20

Posts 131
michigan, usa

0 posted 2003-01-25 08:23 AM

the curtain hoardes the heat
that rises to warm my cold bones
greedily tucking it under her skirt
i watch it with a grimace
and sip my scalding tea quietly
letting its searing heat
sooth my cold soul
winter morning chill
removed by a steaming cup
and a fleece warm shirt
waiting for the heat to escape
the curtain's embrace
to unchill the air
as the day wraps me
in what it must
winter mornings come
but never last forever

(simply put... it sure is cold this morning!)

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

1 posted 2003-01-25 04:41 PM

I like this. The last two lines especially. I think you could have left out your "simply put" note, for this can be read a few different ways.

I enjoyed. Think you wrote this well.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-01-25 05:44 PM

Enjoyed your view of the morning chill. Nice title, nice write. ThisDiamond

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

3 posted 2003-01-25 05:56 PM

can relate on the body heat heating my surroundings..well put

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