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Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

0 posted 2003-01-24 07:56 AM

Cast of Time

When young I built an ark of could
Of things I thought I understood.
A construct for vanities sail
With dogmas insanities nail

Wove the ropes of colored hues.
And the sails of fantasy views
Launched it out on warm soft raves.
And floundered on a storm of waves

I did not mind the rub of hide.
Nor did I mind the loss of pride.
But I had lost some precious time.
For each is timed a flowers prime.

So now I build a cask of wood
For lessons learned and understood.
It took me all this life of dare
To find that love the nail of wear.

And I am weary to the bone
And place a stone upon a stone.

Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

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of Depression

1 posted 2003-01-24 08:22 AM

Turning a fine poetic metaphor
But I really like the last couplet

Gloom

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-01-24 08:28 AM

Gloom
Always like to please. LOL thank you my friend.

Nan

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Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2003-01-24 08:54 AM

Keep building it, Sy... It's a lovely stone wall...

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2003-01-24 09:12 AM

(sigh) Oh Seymour, I just love this, sweet friend, in every interval of time it is unpredictable in many causes what may ebb against the rocky shores but I am certain we won't be caught in follies alone! (big hugggssssss) Good nmorning to you, dear friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Canada eh.

5 posted 2003-01-24 09:13 AM

Beautiful morning read as always Sy!
Much enjoyed as always.
Tea's ready!
~Morning hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So you won't ever forget me~

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-01-24 09:18 AM

Nan,
Thank you sweet.

Noah,
Enjoyed your reply. Thank you

Nancy,
Thank you dear, Morning hugs to you.

SimplyGold
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since 2002-07-10

Posts 1453

7 posted 2003-01-24 09:20 AM

Seymour,

This is lovely, a great way to start the day. Reminding me that tomorrow is now and not to lose sight of hopes and dreams. That yes, I'm older now and though not the flower that I once was, still have a lot of life to live - to live it a little wiser now..

Thanks,

SG

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2003-01-24 09:38 AM

Is there some wine in that cask, Sy?
If so, then, bye and bye,
I'll come and we shall sip some cheer...
and please make sure our poets are there!

SEA

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with you

9 posted 2003-01-24 09:49 AM

"When young I built an ark of could
Of things I thought I understood."

relating...
you do this so perfectly, excellent flow

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

10 posted 2003-01-24 09:58 AM

Many things to think about in this poem. I like this line:

"To find that love the nail of wear."

among many others... Enjoyed....

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Janet Marie
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11 posted 2003-01-24 11:52 AM

When young I built an ark of could
Of things I thought I understood.
=========================

I did not mind the rub of hide.
Nor did I mind the loss of pride.
=========================

So now I build a cask of wood
For lessons learned and understood.
It took me all this life of dare
To find that love the nail of wear.

========================

You are me wiseman poet and those lines above prove it. You understand more than most ever even question..the humility and vulnerability of your rhymes never cease to touch me mothy heart.

*ww*

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (01-24-2003 11:55 AM).]

Salty
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since 2002-11-23

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Texas

12 posted 2003-01-24 12:41 PM

Your words always read like a magic charm...full of meaning and flowing with rhythm.

You Spark!

~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

winston
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since 2002-12-19

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NW of Eden

13 posted 2003-01-24 12:48 PM

Is four quatrains followed by a couplet a standard that you usually work with? Hope you don't mind me asking. Thanks.

It's amazing I won. I was running against peace, prosperity, & incumbency.
--G. "DUBYA" BUSH. June 14, 2001. Unaware of rolling TV camera.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

14 posted 2003-01-24 01:22 PM

SimplyGold
IN YOUTH AND BEAUTY WISDOM IS RARE. THANK YOU.

Sunshine
Enough for all.

SEA
Thank you for the excellent flow.

Pat,
The pleasure of your replies gives me joy.

JM,
Bless your mothy heart. Bring some tea to shangri-la and we will talk of jewels and stars. WWRS

Salty,
Thank you my friend.

winston,
Yes, I've tried others but I like this the best. Thank you

passing shadows
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displaced

15 posted 2003-01-24 02:50 PM

brilliant, man! Once again, you've done it well!

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

16 posted 2003-01-24 03:19 PM

passing shadows
Thank you my friend.

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