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Drexler_McStyles
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 195
Venice, Ca

0 posted 2003-01-24 01:30 AM

Streetlights flicker to life
and eventually die
in the French quarter
the humidity
these four walls
the endless hours between them
a wasp's nest is budding
in the crest of a wave that the failing wallpaper has supplied
rats are chewing on discarded toenails
leaving trails that I do not care to follow
lonely black and white images sag on the face of postcards
hung like the crucifixion
purchase points forgotten
like ancestors who’ve yellowed with age
a role of nickels
lies close at hand
ready to embrace any lurking destitution
or its agents
the transistor radio with an awkward antenna
fizzles the appropriate slow, rusted horns
as I lie upon this filthy mattress
that covers the hole in the floorboards
of this ancient Victorian wonder
In the doorway
she leans, gleaming
her crisp wandering lust
black silk
framing her featurettes
the moon standing behind her
towering over this broken life
I offer her a patch of floor beside me,
a swig from my relief
We spend the night
planning our escape
from dreams we no longer need

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2003-01-24 02:09 AM

Enjoyed reading this...James

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-01-24 03:37 AM

speechless

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2003-01-25 12:09 PM

I like the changes/additions. Fantastic imagery. Your camera lens is sharp and you never fail to expose a hidden story.

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

4 posted 2003-01-26 08:08 AM

Loved the gritty, "smooth as sandpaper" way you wrote this one--excellent!!

"And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul."
Pablo Neruda

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

5 posted 2003-01-26 08:50 AM

This is an exceptional piece with very effective imagery to depict your thoughts... Nicely done, DM...

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2003-01-26 08:58 AM

Drexler,
A well painted journey to no where, enjoyed.

Cpat Hair

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since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

7 posted 2003-01-27 08:09 AM

In the doorway
she leans, gleaming
her crisp wandering lust
black silk
framing her featurettes
the moon standing behind her
towering over this broken life
I offer her a patch of floor beside me,
a swig from my relief
We spend the night
planning our escape
from dreams we no longer need
strong ending...and tight imagery...
I enjoyed..

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2003-01-27 08:28 PM

'a wasp's nest is budding
in the crest of a wave that the failing wallpaper has supplied'

There were so many great visuals, this being only one. I don't think I've read you before, I really liked this.

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