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dhicks03
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0 posted 2003-01-23 11:56 PM


Twist the truth and make our fairytale love
into a bitter nightmare of hate
And I,
will allow what I thought was real
to echo through my mind,
and in time,
slowly die


Lie to yourself, and everyone else
And maybe someday,
Perhaps in a bad way,
You'll have to face,
In a different place ...the truth
and you will sweat, with regret ...the verdict


Poison the well, with water from hell
don't hesitate
to decimate
heavens rain
from above
kill our love
as well with pain


it won't matter now
seems easy somehow
for you
to gently sleep in peace


or that I will lie awake and pray
that this will someday go away
and still to my utter dismay
it's true ...I love you


Copyright © 2001 Dennis Hicks
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5-21-01

© Copyright 2003 Dennis Hicks - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-01-24 12:23 PM


Unrequited love...the sad side of love, Dennis. Well written angst.
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2 posted 2003-01-24 12:28 PM


Too bad there's so much pulling between love and hate these days..you're getting aware of some of the hard truths of life though


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3 posted 2003-01-24 12:33 PM


this hurts...the ending really touches...
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4 posted 2003-01-24 09:33 AM




Dennis,

Liked this a great deal. Can apply to platonic relationships/so-called friendships equally as well. I think the second stanza says it all, more or less. Easier said than done, but to let go and let God is the best thing.

I've not been able to do that until I've tried every thing possible within self to right either a romantic relationship  or a friendship. But, sadly there does come a point of acceptance.
That this is not going to work....

They are as they are...and look within myself to see what my part in it might be....unreasonable expectations, etc...if there were....

You capture broken relationships well and the pain and broken heartedness which goes with it....

Thanks, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

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5 posted 2003-01-24 12:47 PM


sometimes, you just have to coast a while, and live the lie, for someone else
Salty
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6 posted 2003-01-24 01:06 PM


Love doesn't have that spout that you can turn off and on....though I have looked for it many of times.  


a very powerful write this is.


~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

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7 posted 2003-01-24 01:33 PM


Dennis, this is a very heart-felt write. Very touching.....

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

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8 posted 2003-01-24 02:33 PM


I'm always feeling these writings
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