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CSKpoet
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0 posted 2003-01-23 10:58 PM



Last Supper

Her routine rarely varies;
A working mother.....
Days into days of “self sacrifice”
She listens to him with
Iron paws and emasculating jaws,
Swallowing the gingerbread man whole
Quasar syllables, diatribes uncouth
Bounce off concrete jungle walls
Decking the halls with violence and strife
Slapping memories into his fragile youth…..
His latch key tucked away for the night
No help found, no escape in sight
He sits dreaming, wondering
What’s cooking for supper
As she continues to stir
It may be his last....

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

© Copyright 2003 Cheryl Stewart Koomoa - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-01-23 11:20 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Cheryl, this is so deeply touching, sweet friend, God Bless You, this is written sincerely from the bottom of your golden heart, I send angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Cheryl, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

dhicks03
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2 posted 2003-01-23 11:59 PM


Wow, cooked up something with this one !
Nice write!!

ecrivan
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3 posted 2003-01-24 12:43 PM


he's come home late again huh? ...and the lady of the house is cooking up an arguement..uhuh..got it..now your on for a sequel


passing shadows
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4 posted 2003-01-24 04:08 AM


wow! I can feel this one...nice ending!
inkedgoddess
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5 posted 2003-01-24 07:45 AM




i like this, what did you end up serving him......some papers perhaps?

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6 posted 2003-01-24 02:52 PM


Cheryl, this is a different type than your ususal, but I liked it. Sounds just like the situatioin is, sometimes.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

regards2you
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7 posted 2003-01-24 10:13 PM




Cher,

I took this to portray a classic single mother with young to teenaged boy child....and all the difficulties they encounter, and especially him....will he make it through one more day, with the life he's living....(latch-key) and other phrases you used....plus, I was a single mother with kids who had a difficult time adjusting to me being gone til 5:30 PM...

Anyway, this works for me and I enjoyed the poem a great deal....

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Enchantress
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8 posted 2003-01-24 10:18 PM


Cher, much enjoyed the poem as usual.
I enjoy your various topics you  write on.
~Hugs~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

CSKpoet
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Island in Paradise
9 posted 2003-01-24 10:37 PM


A big thanks to all for responding.
Pat got it right.. this refers to the young pre-teen boy next door and all the abuse I hear going on day in and day out...and the mom's views of it to her friends...
but, what I hear has me calling 911 often. I am the "evil " neighbor, because i call the police...
and what she is a cookin' is anger stew and another night of nasty demeaning verbalizations and slaps and crashes,

This breaks my heart.

and hey, I don't argue or fight with my man...I may walk away until we can speak civilized, but no arguements found here and no no no abuse to me or from me.
I have had too many years of that already.

aGAIN, THANKS FOR THE READ AND CARE AND FEEDBACK
another sequel?
GAWD I pray not...
aloha and hugs t' all my friends here at Pips,
Cher


Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

[This message has been edited by CSKpoet (01-24-2003 10:41 PM).]

scorpio
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10 posted 2003-01-24 10:49 PM


Much enjoyed..

believe in what your heart feels...

Eromyna
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11 posted 2003-01-24 11:04 PM


Disturbingly reminiscent. Probably more powerful to me for the memories it stirs up.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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