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Effigy
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disbelief

0 posted 2003-01-23 04:27 PM


What does it contain?

Easy,
       it contains nothing.  (a great deal of nothing)

       But yet, you still want more.

Ahh.  It must contain something you say.

       Perhaps:
                answers to questions
                        never asked,
                or questions with answers
                        not remembered.
Can't be.

You need reason, logic
    infallible proof
               - voodoo magic.

Drink up (see what memories come to light).

                  The imaginary girl stands along the road
                  dead snake in hand
                  only recently removed from
                  warm, dry, sand.
(not a memory that I recall)

         Maybe a story in a book.
               - some verse from an erroneous scroll
               - or just graffiti on a rest stop wall.

But I digress,
     recessed in memories
     yet told.

It contains nothing.


[This message has been edited by Effigy (01-23-2003 04:30 PM).]

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with you
1 posted 2003-01-23 04:55 PM


...and your way of nothing, is in fact...something very cool write
Effigy
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2 posted 2003-01-23 07:05 PM


Thank you. You're to nice.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (01-23-2003 09:00 PM).]

Salty
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3 posted 2003-01-24 03:40 PM


Mysterious write....lots of meaning between lines....of nothing written


Nicely done


~Salty

In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you.
--Deepak Chop

inkedgoddess
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4 posted 2003-01-24 09:22 PM


kind of esoteric, enigmatic, and overall good
garysgirl
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5 posted 2003-01-24 10:08 PM


very interesting.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

scorpio
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right...there
6 posted 2003-01-24 10:12 PM


intriquing write...I need to ponder this some more..

believe in what your heart feels...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2003-01-24 10:12 PM


Way cool write!
~Hugs & Smiles~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
  So you won't ever forget me~

forne_marin
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8 posted 2004-04-23 07:46 PM


Okay,

#1. I like it.
#2. I haven't the slightest idea what it's about.

Neat concept, and nice imagery, but I'm afraid you lost me. I don't understand it.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

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