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inkedgoddess
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0 posted 2003-01-22 02:22 PM




pulled in
by the undertow,
dragged
down
below
to see
my
original face,
the home
that beckons
my return,
in solitude
i find
myself,
in solitutde
i lose
myself,
over
and over,
till im
renewed,
as the
tide
sends
me back,
not yet
clean
enough,
to part
with this
wretched
transient
place

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (01-22-2003 08:09 PM).]

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1 posted 2003-01-22 02:25 PM


very cool write...but the title???
inkedgoddess
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2 posted 2003-01-22 02:28 PM


got upset driving home from work;
a car ran over a bird, just got to me, people do it everyday, without a thought,
i took the birds soul and wrote this

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3 posted 2003-01-22 02:36 PM


Wow... I really really like this.  
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4 posted 2003-01-22 02:46 PM


excellent explination. I have hit one bird one time, I cried for a week...it's very upsetting. Knowing the why of the title, I like the poem that much more
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5 posted 2003-01-22 02:50 PM


stark...and well executed

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6 posted 2003-01-22 06:12 PM


in solitude
i find
myself,
in solitutde
i lose
myself,
over
and over,
till im
renewed


Love the explanation of the title.  Inspiration comes from some very different places sometimes.  

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7 posted 2003-01-22 06:35 PM


Beautiful... Enjoyed the read.

I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait.

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8 posted 2003-01-22 07:16 PM


inkedgoddess--Very unusual...could feel the emotional pull of your feelings.
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9 posted 2003-01-22 07:17 PM


inked, youre great. i too loved the explanation. youre a deep lady.i enjoy reading your thoughts.
lots of love , gemma xxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2003-01-22 07:41 PM


inkedgoddess - yes, it says of your thoughts on that day...

BC

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11 posted 2003-01-22 08:42 PM




Michele,

Really enjoyed this. The third read and I was feeling it completely.
Quite well done.

Thanks. Pat

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bklynboy
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12 posted 2003-01-22 08:51 PM


This shows how really deep you are and sensitive.....but obtuse? I dont know. You are an enigma.
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13 posted 2003-01-22 08:55 PM


Michele, I liked it, too, and also the explanation. You are a very compassionate person, Michele....very caring.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~  
                  

[This message has been edited by garysgirl (01-22-2003 09:02 PM).]

inkedgoddess
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14 posted 2003-01-22 10:12 PM


thanks everyone,
bklyn, dont you remember the national bklyn bird, the pidgeon, the one that never left us while others flew away,

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