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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunlight on old brick Lightens the shadows Of narrow streets. Last nights cold Seeping away The clap of shoe leather Sets the beat for music. Tunes played in soft colors Of faded paint on an old sky And wrought iron trills Set on balcony where Morning coffee adds A counterpoint To sleepy eyes. Someone Played a symphony of grass In manicured notes that jive While another Waltzed columns white Then I heard the blue notes Of an old black mans smile And could not stop myself From an answering echo. I felt the sonata played By lapping edge of levee As it soothed the passing flow And found myself awash In clefts Shoe leather Keeping always Beat with time |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
oh my. I read this with Mozart playing--and I think I left my body.  (not a bad deal these days  )I wanna keep this one too... and I realized too, after I read, and thought, "I wish I'd been there"--that I just was...so thank you.  |
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A Tone of Voice Member
since 2001-07-18
Posts 287 |
Cpat, You are really talented and I throughly enjoyed reading this and plus all the others I've read of yours~! Atov~~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wow! Your imagery is so fantastic Ron! Oh how I want to go there sometime. Wonderful write...much enjoyed. ~Hugs~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"Tunes played in soft colors Of faded paint on an old sky And wrought iron trills Set on balcony where Morning coffee adds A counterpoint To sleepy eyes." You just amaze me....  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ron, I would have quoted the exact lines which SEA did. Also, though I've watched documentaries with camera not missing 'a beat', your writing is sooooo good that the sound comes through this poem so much better than the real audio....such talent; you put me there listening to the shoes, et al. Enjoyed a great deal. Thank you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tunes played in soft colors Of faded paint on an old sky And wrought iron trills Set on balcony where Morning coffee adds A counterpoint To sleepy eyes. Someone Played a symphony of grass In manicured notes that jive While another Waltzed columns white ========================= see what you paint in me mothy mind.....  damn youre good I was reborn on the shores of the Chesapeake Bay |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ser... glad you liked...and glad it made you feel as if you had been there. ATOV... thank you for the kind words. It is always pleasing to know someone enjoyed what you wrote...and it pleases me to know you did. Nancy... buy a ticket and go! just be careful she lets you come back ( smiling) she seems to want to capture you and keep you or a part of you once you are there. SEA.. nothing to be amazed about or by my friend... I just hack away at the keys and write top of head stuff... you are kind to think it worthwhile to read. Pat... you are truly kind.... thank you. JM... your mothy mind got the picture just about right...a little older perhaps and a little more wear on the edges...but the style..the style is indeed just that.. you dear lady..are far too kind with your praise... but I thank you anyway |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote:  Yes! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
can you write one about the caribbean, rather be there, any day!!! good stuff tho, here, and dictionary free on this one....... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunshine.... glad you liked that.. Inked... hmmm...could write one about Mexico, been there on the coast, but the islands are tougher..they have a flavor all their own and steel drum rythms to capture garish color.. I'd have to think about that and change the wording patterns to carry the warm breeze and easy nights.. now see there...you have me thinking about it anyway.. ( laughing) |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Tunes played in soft colors Of faded paint on an old sky And wrought iron trills Set on balcony where Morning coffee adds A counterpoint To sleepy eyes. It's not often that I can see and hear a poem as I did this. Ya done impressed me Ron! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Duncan... I'm amazed I might impress you.. and pleased this might find some favor with you.. thanks for the lines and the nice words |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I've smoked a symphony of grass on Bourbon Street...then drank a bunch of Jax beer, then asked some bartender why her breasts were so small....yep...Mardi Gras! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Toe... I think you and I would enjoy seeing it together...of course it might be a while before we got out of lockup. Police down there don't seem to have near the sense of humor the crowds do.. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron--Wonderful imagery has captured a flavor and feel that makes it real. I'm really enjoying your trip to New Orleans. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thank you Martie... glad you enjoyed. Figured it was time to show the other side of her... or at least try. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Forgot to ask, did you happen to see Jillian Barberie while you were there? |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Honest truth Hair...All of the above is true....in fact....at the same bar, when the bartender took offense to what I'd said, (not that I blame her), I asked her if she was a lesbian and if she yodeled in the valley with the waitress....After I left that bar unexpectedly, I headed over to Pat Obrien's...drank some Hurricanes...threw up all the way back to the Monteleon Hotel and watched the gals on the balconies...ya wanna meet me there in a few weeks? [This message has been edited by Toerag (01-22-2003 05:55 PM).] |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
when i read you...it is as someone is reading aloud to me...amazing...h |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
hot days,hotter nights,pastel skies,pastel cottages,reggae and dredlocks, hot babes, hot studs, pina coladas, and smoke, im going in about 3 weeks, make me remember ........dont make me run to the dictionary too much either, okay |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Yay! I would love to see historic Storyville and hear some folk play some old Jelly Roll Morton tunes down there, New Orleans is a delightful city to me, I love it, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Laissez Les Bon Temps Rouler |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Thank all... appreciate the comments and kind words.. Toe... you know I don't speak english well..and you go throwing french/cajun at me.. ( chuckling) but yes..let the good time roll.. Now..as for meeting you down there. I have a problem... I went down on business and scheduled the trip a month in advance, reminded my bosses, told them the Monday before I left again....and when I got back..they were asking me where I had been...and next time I needed to make sure I was around when there were problems. ( which there were and which I fixed from my Hotel room using a laptop) (laughing)... anyway... I think I am grounded for a while.. and won't be making any trips... it did finally get them to OK the request I had in to add a backup person to my dept so someone could troubleshoot issues while I was away..or asleep..or in case I got hit by a bus...or thrown in lockup.... It will probably be a while before they let me out and about again... |
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